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 | Storm Harbor  [E] Darius is back in a city that he once called home to hopefully clear his name.  |
| (4.5)  A review from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  First Impressions: This felt like it was part of a longer story. It was a great teaser and I was very curious who the characters were and what brought them to this place. What had Darius done that he now needed to clear his name, and what was the truth Justina had confessed? And the mysterious woman who waited for them - they clearly knew each other and didn't seem to be on friendly terms. I'd love to read more about all of them.  Suggestions: The story was well written but I have a couple of suggestions: Their presence was expected Darius’s bounty still hung on every post from Storm harbor to Daggerdeep. There seemed to be some punctuation missing. I would probably turn this into two sentences with a period after "expected". a ring glittering on her finger silver set with onyx Again, I think this needs some punctuation. Maybe a colon after "finger" would work.  Final Thoughts: If this was just a scene that popped into your head when you saw the prompts, you did well creating something quite intriguing that made me want to read on. If this is part of a longer tale, perhaps it would be a good idea to provide a link to the rest of it at the end. Either way, I thought this was an interesting story and I enjoyed the read.
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