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 Review #4854827 |
Santa and an Alien Ship Crash  [E] Santa was busy delivering his toys when... Surprise... an alien ship crashes into him.  |
| (4.5)  First impression: It’s not the right time of year for this story, but when I scrolled through your fiction folders, the title of this one caught my eye and I couldn’t resist. I love that you chose ‘Experience’ as one of the genres. It was funny that the police officers didn’t seem particularly surprised to see Santa or the alien in his spaceship that was built like Santa’s sleigh - the only thing they noted was that they saw both together so individually, it wouldn’t have been unusual. Santa, on the other hand, was quite surprised, and especially the design of the ship seemed to vex him. Everyone took the mishap in their stride though and (relatively) calmly went to work to fix it. Suggestions: The story was well written and I only noticed a couple of errors: A policeman answered Santa, flummoxed overseeing an alien, and Santa at the same time. Was that meant to say, “over seeing”, two words? and notice the little alien “noticed”, past tense. Final thoughts: The ending was very fitting with the empty night sky and no photos to prove that any of it really happened. I enjoyed this bit of Christmas magic in February!   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 02/05/2026 @ 3:23pm EST