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| âShow, donât tellâ is valuable advice for every writer. Perhaps even more so for the short story writer. The limited word count in a short story means our writing has to work a bit harder. Letâs look at how we achieve it in Part One of this mini-series. |
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 Why we should show, not tell
âShowingâ brings our stories to life. It helps the characters jump off the page, allowing readers to connect with the stories much faster. When we âshowâ, our readers take part in the scene. When we âtellâ, they only observe the scene.
Example - Telling
It was a dark and stormy night. The shutters were flapping in the wind. The noise woke the man. He looked out the window at the harbor. The wind was blowing, and the boats were at its mercy.
Example - Showing:
It was the slap-bang-slap of the shutters that woke him. The howling wind had tugged them loose. He slid the window up and tried to grab at the swinging shutters, but the wind grabbed it back.
âWeâll have to get it from the outside,â Marc said behind him. âDadâs already on his way down to secure the moorings. The boat has come undone.âHe tried to reach the shutter again, but the wind held it back. âDammit.â He grabbed his slicker and followed his brother.
As they made their way down the path, the rain hit them, stinging their face. The swell was huge, and the waves crashed with merciless abandon. The boat hit the jetty with another thud and something splintered.
A closer look...
In the âtellingâ example, there is more distance between the reader and the story. The reader is told what's happening but not provided the opportunity to feel the urgency, tension, or fear.
In the âshowingâ example, we know very little about the brothers and their relationship with their father, but their actions are more emotional and specific.
 Choosing a viewpoint character will help you to focus your writing.
In the telling example, weâre being told what the weather was like. In the showing example, we can almost feel it. Try to avoid using the words see, hear, feel, smell, and touch.
Be specific with descriptions; layering them for emphasis.
Try to avoid using 'telling' words. If you find yourself using words like 'was', âwereâ, âisâ, âareâ, âhaveâ, and âhadâ - you might be telling.
Words such as âappearedâ, âwonderedâ, âdecidedâ, and âseemedâ, make us âtellâ. Instead, try Using strong verbs like tugged, grabbed, peered, pelted, picked, and crashed. Can you feel the difference?
Dialogue helps! As soon as characters start speaking, they come alive. Remember dialogue includes the words spoken aloud, internal thoughts, body language and expressions, and dialogue tags.
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