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J.M new poem When we are most upset Astounded and amazed By infallible failures We retreat most into other somber affairs Somber music, art, company It seems to be retroactive, cause and effect. Questions which blossom from wandering eyes storm the forests of our reactions. Why? they ask. Why? we ask as well. Clearly a mirror both receives and answers. Strangely this jewel encrusted bizarre empathy Which God bestowed so lovingly upon us, to the detriment of everything else Must be utilized in self reflection alone. We not only do, but should retreat into these somber chambers. Grief is best accompanied with grief. Misery best accompanied with pity. Because if we do not indulge ourselves, if we do not pity our own state who will? This universe, which laughs at us mercilessly? Jeez new poem In order to impress her, or impression myself upon her I became unique. I became the lost poet, The tormented artist The man of external joy and internal strife All this I assumed, appropriated Many I already was, but motivation came in the form of a row boat upon two parted seas. Opening only to let through the most prestigious of passengers. However, in attempting to be something, the genuine is surpassed, overcome, undermined. I became myself once again. The self I had partially misplaced. But in becoming myself, I undermined myself. In many cases I’ve heard, you find her but lose yourself. I lost her and myself I think. As love came, luck left. And as my eyes diverted from one field to another, my whole harvest was spoiled. These bitter plums I’m left to enjoy, away from myself, away from her. Poem new poem How can line after line Of empty verse Book after book Of hollow prose Falter so greatly, Be so irreparably incapable As to diminish their entire form as useless. Novels are but elongated versions of impotent prose, poetry but a stylized version of melodramatic rhetoric. What need does literature have in its entirety, When it’s hooks cast from ashore Can not capture in any sense Her face, 10 inches across Within which I can consummate my being And undoubtedly confirm, it’s the whole world It’s the entire world of course Today I learned, within a single wave Within parted tides, or that aberration which unknowingly makes it to shore, to greet my legs I have known the whole ocean. Just as in her face, I have known everything that knowing has to offer. Neruda new poem He said Even if you cut all the flowers, you cannot stop the spring from coming. But if the garden of my pleasures Is ravaged And each plant with great care removed With bare hands and some with tools And the weeds overgrown and infesting My palace, and grow over my fence And insects which dominate as warlords Tribal conflict reflected in mounds and hills Ancient battlegrounds of dead grass and dead mice Even then spring will come he said. For you can bring all the world to its knees, and even then spring will come But with even the slightest twitch, the slightest flick or fleeting glance Love recedes into oblivion, never to be seen again. I fall in and out of love, with the passing of moons and buses, or the wind in one way or another, a raindrop on my forehead or my cheek. Yet even then my love is stronger than any bonds which spring can fathom. Strange new poem I walk as if The horizon has illuminated something great Beyond this The cool bliss Albeit briefly Allows chilling winds to caress my thoughts And my face Once again I realize; I am always reflected here. Movement in space, is never empty. Always a quite constitution is and will be, everything. Behind those small jitters advancing What within my mind is constant? Meandering on the ground Every inch of movement Conceivable And within my own world The walls my own domain I have wandered countless times And every segregation As first The jewel encrusted pavement The prayer mats of concrete The solar system of street lamps Of which my orbit is more precise And inevitable than any other I have distinguished all Within a line, doubtless countless times And I am one whom is never mistaken Over which path to be taken. And yet Whether we walk the same path Endlessly Whether the whole world I traverse, in mind or in verse In reversed eyes or rains of thirst If I walk with her. Then she is first Mind purged of witness Of the minute worlds of ants and such Of this grandeur of life Except her face which does come first Forever within my heart, this curse. |