I wrote two lines 7/7 in response to other peoples hokku for a June 2020 contest. |
Is there a season implied not stated? Is an emotion evoked rather than stated? Is there a juxtaposition of images? I left out capitalization unless it's a formal name. I did not include titles ... that's a very western concept. I did the best I could if I wasn't certain of time, place or specifics. Since rengas can be a type of 'parlor game' I'm trying to respond as quickly as possible. I suspect originally there was little time to edit unless poets were sending messages back and forth by letters and they just may have been! Do note: this may look like a tanka but when there are two or more poets writing, a renga goes off in a direction that the poet who starts it doesn't intend. My responses therefore are MY responses. Ah... and to write my own quick American hokku: #0 peonies glisten walking through heavy sweetness two drenched surfboarders Kåre Enga in Montana (Montana) #1 low gunmetal skies poets threatened with downpours chilly winter's wind Elle - on hiatus (North Island, New Zealand) across tranquil sunlit seas my lover smells pressed flowers Kåre Enga in Montana #2 shade of giant tree lacy shadows cool poets summer parasol Tinker (No California) we swear at bold mosquitoes; our pencils stab blank papers Kåre Enga in Montana #3 in the Sar river the grey granite Madonna heralds the solstice ridinghhood-p.boutilier (about NW Spain) I watch a lone child searching, tadpoles and glass his treasures Kåre Enga in Montana #4 howl of cicadas— we, wordsmiths all, shake with beats of drums, dream of home concrete_angel (memory of Japan) back home under a blanket, air conditioner full blast Kåre Enga in Montana #5 sultry summer eve underneath my Linden tree dusky balladry Eric Wharton (Mississippi) twin boys run through long shadows; grandmother calls them to bed Kåre Enga in Montana #6 novice builders under a forest's hot sun a shed raising eyestar~* (Canada) one plank, one nail at a time; a new refuge for chipmunks Kåre Enga in Montana #7 VA hospital constant refuge for wounded safety net for vets Dave (South Carolina) hot winds, cold winds, under tall loblolly pines, cool breezes Kåre Enga in Montana #8 glorious buds bloom like virtuoso voices singing sacred psalms Vanishing Vapor (?) linens flap, dry on the line cleansed of the runt cat's present Kåre Enga in Montana #9 summertime musings ebb and flow on a sea of creativity Nani - Blessed Indeed (SW Georgia) red soil clings to little ones until baptized, rinsed and dried Kåre Enga in Montana #10 dogwoods blooming free redbuds coloring the world daffodils sprouting Lisa Noe (SE Kentucky) 'neath the brows of black mountains, miner's shed blood for their rights (June 1973) Kåre Enga in Montana #11 Blue skies hold crisp air tall mountains look to their feet - garden of poets Writer_Mike (Colorado) evening primroses open as notebooks are put away Kåre Enga in Montana For: Round 73
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