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Nina suddenly sprang to her feet. She was spooked a by what sounded like a door being opened. She slowed walk towards the exit door of her room. She grabbed her Government issued glock nine that was placed in a safe near the exit. She also had already a small handgun strapped to her ankle. Nina was not what you would call an average women. She is 5’10 and a lanky type build but she is very firm and strong in her upper lower body. She almost always dressed in black as it seemed to go well with her career. She has been well trained from her years in the Military, Secret Service and Interpol. She speaks fluently in 7 different foreign languages and working on learning more such as Arabic. As Nina slowly opened the door she noticed a man she recognized standing in the hallway leading to living room. “Well Charlie I see you let yourself in without knocking or letting me know you were coming!” Nina said. Charlie responded, “I didn’t want to wake you and I knew I had some important information for you but figured I’d let you rest a little while longer”. Nina had only laid down not even 2 hours before and had been up 48 hours before that working undercover for the US Government to try and stop a planned terrorist attack on a Naval Shipyard on the west coast. She had thought that everything had been taking care of and the attack was aborted cause she and her team had neutralized the threat. Nina responded, ”Well I’m awake now so what info do you have that caused you to enter my place without my permission?” she hesitated and then said, “it better be good cause I could shot you and claim self-defense even though I might not live to make the court date.” Charlie quickly respond, “I’m really sorry to enter your home unannounced but I had good intentions and I just got a message from the top that the attack on that West Coast Naval Shipyard was a diversion the real attack is still in the planning stages and we might be too late to stop it.” Nina felt a uneasy feeling in her stomach and then said, “Well then where is the real attack supposed to take place?” Charlie said as he too had an uneasy feeling in his stomach, “We have intercepted a message that was sent to the terrorist cell in charge of the attack and it told them to go to plan B which was encrypted but was revealed by our NSA guys as saying to sail a cargo ship containing explosives with C-4’s strapped to the outer perimeter of the ship and 2 tons of gas filled barrels located inside cargo ship and crash it into a west coast port they had already been told before hand.” Charlie paused and then said, “ We don’t know what Port there going to hit!” (Part 1) Nina happened to currently be staying on the west coast in a secluded area about 30 miles north of Seattle. Her 1st concern was the many ports that were located in Seattle. “Well we need to figure out where were most venerable at and where we can be hurt the most” said Nina. “Well that’s a good point but realistically there are more than few ports on west coast that could hurt us not only loss in life but financially.” said Charlie. He continued “there are a few here in Seattle that are very venerable and could cripple us financially and loss of life is great depending on when they hit and I’m guessing there going try and strike during peak times”. Nina also was thinking about California and what ports there could be venerable. “Lets get in touch with our connection’s in LA were going need to get an idea of where we stand there cause there’s not doubt the damage California could have if one of there ports were hit.” Charlie responded,” I’ve already done that I’m waiting on a response in the next few hours.” Nina replied, ”I guess then we need to get on the ball and find out where this cargo ship is heading”. Nina and Charlie headed out the door and entered a private helicopter heading to office of the Port Authority to get a briefing on where the cargo ships come from and where they load and unload at near Seattle and surrounding areas on the Washington Coast. They found out all cargo goes through Strait of Juan de Fuca before it heads to Seattle and it could be a place they could setup to watch and possible inspect carefully Cargo that could be loaded with the deadly explosives. Charlie would also learn from his contacts in LA that the most venerable for a port attack would be San Francisco, San Diego or LA. San Francisco was easiest to spy cause there was a small entry way into the San Francisco Bay if the cargo was headed just for San Francisco only but they still could spy close to that area . Now that they had a good idea of where the cargo was headed. Nina was now trying to also see where the cargo had to come from. She had a list of a few countries that could have there cargo high jacked and now she need to find out where and if terrorist could get help from them. |