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Journal of a Spaced-Out Brain -poetry-

by Vanishing Vapor

Rated: E · Book · Writing · #2207307

You are a vapor that appears for a little while and then vanishes away. James 4:14

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Kåre เลียม Enga

Jul 11, 2024 at 7:23pm
In response to "My cat rests on my pillow"

This is why you need two pillows

.

Or to put it another way... a wise cat always provides an extra pillow for their servant.

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Wordsmitty ✍️

Jul 11, 2024 at 7:13pm
In response to "My cat rests on my pillow"

So true. ( It's really the cat's pillow.

)

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Spirit~Fall🍁🍂 Writer

Jun 22, 2024 at 12:17pm
In response to "Wish for Summer Snow"

Yikes Kare that's quite a big change 😲.

To respond to the blog, I enjoyed your descriptions and contrast of the seasons!
Very nice 🙂👍 and caught my eye. Write ✍️ on!

Kåre เลียม Enga

Jun 21, 2024 at 3:18pm
In response to "I'll Scream within my Dream"

Time to consider entering this or one of your other recent poems into Poetic Traditions (as you have before).

Nicely done.

Kåre เลียม Enga

Jun 21, 2024 at 1:21pm
In response to "Wish for Summer Snow"

I went from 108 to 35 when I came back to Montana. And yes, it snowed; but, now the heat will finally settle in at the end of June. Oh, how we suffer.

At least in Thailand we had a/c. I will wilt next week.

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Vanishing Vapor

Dec 17, 2023 at 5:42pm
In response to "Hindsight"

If Christianity is true, would you like to know?

Kåre เลียม Enga

Dec 17, 2023 at 12:58am
In response to "Hindsight"

My body will feed the worms; my soul will return to its Source.

I'm not Christian so I look at things differently than most folks here at WDC.

Kåre เลียม Enga

Nov 19, 2023 at 9:09am
In response to "Temptation"

Wonderful rhythm and rhyme. It rolls... And yes, spiders need to eat too. They know where to dine... or they starve.

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Kåre เลียม Enga

Oct 29, 2023 at 1:19am
In response to "Kidder"

I really like this as is but I share some thoughts:

Now go the hell away. Very good use of this line. I'd make it the title unless a specific event or place comes to mind. Like "Workshop, May 32nd, Highway-to-Hell, Nevada".

I'd find active verbs for each use of 'is' and replace each 'the'. Like "May's sky screams blue; Spring's sea blooms green". This provides a season and action, sound, something.

Could use a grammar check unless you like it as is. Grammar is less important in poetry; this isn't an essay. For a definite pause (like for rhythm) you can use an emdash instead of a comma like: "I kid you not — nature's obscene,"

To add "darkness" to it... this is that season...

Explorers with lost souls explore,
Search worlds they've never searched before,
They'll kid you not — forevermore,
Now go the hell away.

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Vanishing Vapor

Aug 11, 2023 at 12:30pm
In response to "The Lighthouse of Whispers"

Whispers the names of all that suffered because of one's bad choices so that pain is returned.

#192. A Reason
ID #1078138 entered on October 12, 2024 at 2:06am

#191. Deep in the Night
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#190. My cat rests on my pillow
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#189. wind on my face
ID #1073836 entered on September 11, 2024 at 3:32pm

#188. Dust on Crumbled Stone
ID #1073212 entered on July 17, 2024 at 4:09pm

#187. No Soup
ID #1073151 entered on June 25, 2024 at 4:35am

#186. I'll Scream within my Dream
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#185. Wish for Summer Snow
ID #1072969 entered on June 21, 2024 at 11:03pm

#184. War
ID #1070447 entered on May 3, 2024 at 12:34pm

#183. Vanishing Vapor
ID #1070396 entered on June 25, 2024 at 4:17am

#182. Talking to Myself Day
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#181. Lonely February Bird
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#180. Trampled Moss
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#179. Ladybug
ID #1063367 entered on February 3, 2024 at 5:44am

#178. My Love
ID #1063341 entered on February 2, 2024 at 8:33pm

#177. Sometimes
ID #1063258 entered on February 10, 2024 at 11:00pm

#176. Hindsight
ID #1060608 entered on December 7, 2023 at 5:06am

#175. Temptation
ID #1059653 entered on December 1, 2023 at 4:59pm

#174. Kidder
ID #1056253 entered on November 18, 2023 at 8:07pm

#173. strings attached
ID #1056049 entered on November 17, 2023 at 10:00pm

#172. just kidding
ID #1056005 entered on September 20, 2023 at 6:35pm

#171. Falling on a sword
ID #1055922 entered on September 18, 2023 at 6:43pm

#170. Prayers
ID #1055840 entered on November 21, 2023 at 4:46am

#169. Oranges
ID #1053882 entered on September 20, 2023 at 6:09pm

#168. Dead as a doornail
ID #1053814 entered on December 8, 2023 at 8:21pm

#167. Salvaged?
ID #1053315 entered on November 21, 2023 at 5:03am

#166. Synthetic Motives
ID #1053091 entered on August 12, 2023 at 3:22am

#165. Shoulda?
ID #1051469 entered on June 23, 2023 at 3:39pm

#164. Safe from the fire below
ID #1051459 entered on December 21, 2023 at 11:40pm

#163. Who do I write for?
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#162. Fireproof
ID #1051303 entered on June 19, 2023 at 3:57am

#161. In Tents
ID #1051302 entered on August 9, 2023 at 4:19pm

#160. He answered me
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#159. Nugget
ID #1051289 entered on June 19, 2023 at 2:46am

#158. I dabble in babble.
ID #1051157 entered on June 16, 2023 at 4:39pm

#157. Say, what?
ID #1051155 entered on June 19, 2023 at 2:31am

#156. Junk
ID #1050943 entered on June 19, 2023 at 1:56am

#155. The Blues
ID #1050762 entered on June 16, 2023 at 4:24pm

#154. What do you see
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#153. Humble
ID #1050726 entered on August 9, 2023 at 4:39pm

#152. On knees
ID #1050545 entered on June 7, 2023 at 2:11pm

#151. The Lighthouse of Whispers
ID #1049878 entered on June 10, 2023 at 12:37am

#150. The Need
ID #1049877 entered on June 19, 2023 at 3:45am

#149. Ego
ID #1049876 entered on June 19, 2023 at 3:48am

#148. Avocado
ID #1049678 entered on May 31, 2023 at 5:34pm

#147. Falling on a sword
ID #1049660 entered on August 14, 2023 at 12:55am

#146. Dog-mom
ID #1049590 entered on May 14, 2023 at 1:41pm

#145. S.K.Y.
ID #1045687 entered on May 26, 2023 at 1:12pm

#144. soul
ID #1045541 entered on February 26, 2023 at 12:32am

#143. A Place of Love
ID #1044578 entered on February 10, 2023 at 8:19pm

#142. Line
ID #1044491 entered on February 9, 2023 at 5:14am

#141. Insane
ID #1043961 entered on January 31, 2023 at 7:55pm

#140. Art
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#139. Where we are
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#138. OKy
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#137. Prompous
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#136. Food for Thought
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#135. Dig it!
ID #1035238 entered on May 31, 2023 at 2:11pm

#134. My Portal
ID #1034731 entered on July 11, 2022 at 1:19pm

#133. Prickly Pear
ID #1034697 entered on July 4, 2022 at 5:06pm

#132. Tip
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#131. Skittle #25
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#130. Skittle #20
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#129. Skittle #15
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#128. Skittle #10
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#127. Skittle #5
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#126. Andy Acorn
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#125. At My Age
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#124. Perfect Glory
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#123. Joke's on you
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#122. The Office
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#121. Advice
ID #1023720 entered on December 27, 2021 at 12:40pm

#120. Seems to me...
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#119. God in Three Persons
ID #1021123 entered on November 8, 2021 at 2:24am

#118. Asking for a friend...
ID #1020907 entered on November 5, 2021 at 1:39pm

#117. To be clear
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#116. Working Title: High Again
ID #1020904 entered on November 5, 2021 at 1:01pm

#115. Sevenling: Eyes See
ID #1018982 entered on October 8, 2021 at 8:35pm

#114. Word Zone
ID #1014205 entered on July 23, 2021 at 6:15pm

#113. Unusual
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#112. Sin
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#111. Broccoli
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#110. Expected
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#109. Worth
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#108. Chuckle
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#107. The Heart
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#106. Entry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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#105. How my crappy voice recognition helps write poetry
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#104. Crazy
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#103. There Was Something
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#102. Appearances
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#101. American Sentence
ID #999671 entered on December 5, 2020 at 2:35am

#100. At Dawn
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#99. Another Morning
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#98. Big Words
ID #998289 entered on November 13, 2020 at 3:46pm

#97. Rotten Apples
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#96. Picking Fruit
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#95. Show, don't tell
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#94. personal prison
ID #996569 entered on November 2, 2020 at 11:57am

#93. Three Squared
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