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The Hunt Open in new Window. (13+)
Social interaction between two brothers, father had called it. Bonding.


Where do I begin... I EDITED. I believe a scrapped at least half of the "was"s, the "had"s and the "going to"s. I didn't realize that almost 1% of the words I use is "was"! I also removed a bunch of descriptive words and restructured some of the paragraphs. I've still got lots to do!
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Travel the world Open in new Window. (E)
When I flipped the postcard over I was struck by surprise! (Writing exercise)


I'd like to thank everyone again for thoroughly reviewing my article, it helped me out a lot!
I changed "a few year ago" to "a few years ago". Thank you for catching that!
I noticed that the article said "in the news" and I changed that to "on the news".

And for anyone that would want to know more about postcrossing:
https://www.postcrossing.com/

I have now removed the GP award for reviews of this article.
Thanks again fro the reviews!
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Social interaction between two brothers, father had called it. Bonding.

Here it goes! My first actual entry on WdC. I'm both excited and afraid for what people will think about it. I think I did at least a decent job, but I am looking forward to any critical review. I want to improve this first Aluinnia chapter!

I forgot to specify that this was actually a chapter from a bigger story in the description, so I edited that.
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