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 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
dropped this to under 3k words for a contest. Do you read this as Young Adult fiction?
I've just edited an item in my portfolio:
 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
I re-worked some of the passages. I needed to show the women as being the force contributing to the advancement of this early society.
From some input, I've just edited an item in my portfolio:
 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
I would like some more critiques and suggestions, thanks.
I've added a new first draft to my portfolio:
 To Survive Open in new Window. (E)
First draft of possible YA non-dystopian story set in the early Ice Age = PLEASE CRITIQUE
critique requested
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 Alluding to Too Much Open in new Window. (E)
common mistake corrected by a memory trick
mainly to tell you this didn't take too long.
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The Firelight Honor Open in new Window. (E)
... the crowd murmured as firelight flashed on the old man's knife blade ...
by removing the "spoiler" I hadn't realized was in the description
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On The Fast Track - Stalking 'Gators Open in new Window. (E)
Adventures in tracking nature's trail signs.
after a comment that the coffee pot was unnecessary for the story, I changed "necessary pot of coffee" to requisite pot of coffee.
That's m' story and I'm sticking to it!
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The idea of an unnecessary coffee pot is a bit foreign to me. I suppose there are folk who live without one, but if I didn't have a coffee pot, my days wouldn't be stories. They wouldn't even be post-it notes on the menu.
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Buster Dog and the A-Team Cake Open in new Window. (E)
... half an hour before the birthday guests were to arrive, disaster struck ...
broke this into more readable paragraphs.
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Young-Adult Readers & Classics, Really? Open in new Window. (13+)
Some surprising stories you wouldn't normally connect to the authors
far as I know these stories aren't censored yet. Although "hunting" and "murder" appear in two of the titles.
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The Drive-in Banshees Open in new Window. (E)
Children of a Marine wouldn't be afraid of a Horror Movie at the Drive-in, would they?
was accepted as a reprint by Boomer Magazine
posted in August 20th edition.
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Mentor - The Very Cool Mister Rath Open in new Window. (E)
A demanding teacher sets aside curriculum to present a lesson from the heart.
a reviwer suggested I change my notes about the story, into a final paragraph. It worked. A very nice rounding out of this recollection.
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Cracked Circle of Life Open in new Window. (NPL)
Some people cannot face the reality of death until they first run it through a filter.
Now just 500 words, and terror from the sea!
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Cracked Circle of Life Open in new Window. (NPL)
Some people cannot face the reality of death until they first run it through a filter.
cold hard fiction
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Adventures In Haiku - Open in new Window. (E)
This essay developed from my introduction for a breakout session at a writers' conference.
it has been pointed out to me that the second Haiku example can be read as if a Senryu styled poem. I've now made note in the essay.
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The Drive-in Banshees Open in new Window. (E)
Children of a Marine wouldn't be afraid of a Horror Movie at the Drive-in, would they?
Upon a reader's advice I changed "Dad's" station wagon, to "Our station wagon..."
They had had a momentary pause, even going back up to read, thinking maybe he was a father with just week-end custody. So I changed it, - foxtale, a Boomer still learning !

But I cannot - will not change the street crazies in my story "Sergeant Gus" as they are based on real characters!
(Besides I was pretty sure "Dykes on Bikes" - who were there in the era - is copyrighted, so I put them in Fezzes, based on two gals wearing Pink Fezzes as they strolled arm and arm across the campus- most likely a sorority initiation prank. )
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