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Apple on Eden Open in new Window. (13+)
My attempt at allegorical imagery - playing with perception - any feedback is appreciated

Please let me know what you think. I was working on making this feel "uniquely dark" but also wanted to leave the ending up to the reader. Allowing the reader to participate in the story by adding details and helping to finish the imagery. I used the Adam, Eve, Lucifer characters and sprinkled in some social commentary. But with the short form, it is not always easy to get across the emotional response that readers enjoy.

Any feedback you can give me would help with my revisions.
Thank you.
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I LEFT Open in new Window. (13+)
A poem about my time in Desert Storm - about coming home. Feedback Please.

Any Feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks
I've just edited an item in my portfolio
Would love some feedback.
I'm think about turning this into a longer short story:
Apple on Eden Open in new Window. (13+)
My attempt at allegorical imagery - playing with perception - any feedback is appreciated
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