mistake i really like your work, this piece built up beautifully. from the single words building to the more complex sentences serves an effective crescendo to the end. And the final contrast with the light and dark was powerful.
i liked this powem because its something that i can relate to at times, and you do a good job of communicating the introverted state. Feeling shy is one thing but you express that this shyness is a vulnerability and people can see it. Some tactically placed imagery would have augumented your well presented emotional state.
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