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I will most likely review the idea of the writing piece and how it connected to me emotionally and how I felt while reading it. I try to leave constructive criticism with everything I read.
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I like to think I am good at finding a way of making words flow correctly and if needed I can comb through a shorter piece for grammatical or spelling errors.
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I prefer reading and writing fictional, engaging, and exciting pieces. I read many fantasy and Sci-Fi books but am willing to expand on the premises.
Least Favorite Genres
I strongly dislike books that drag out and dont do well with numbers or names. I easily lose interest and I have a horrible memory when it comes to names.
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While I do enjoy reading a good book, I do find it hard to put aside time to sit down and read something long without getting distracted or bored. I prefer to read short stories and poems although if given time, I will probs enjoy a longer piece.
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Review by Avari W. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I like this idea and think the concept is really realistic when talking about the desperate reaction of society and The Church. I think that the way it's written brings a sort of light-heartedness to it which I find almost funny. Personally, I think if you are trying to add more fear, try adding a few more details. For example, when you describe when Hazel falls down the stairs, describe the fear in her eyes when she loses her footing or the fear Jamie feels when he sees her fall or the sound she makes against the floor. Just my personal take on the story, though.
Really good job overall! Keep up the great work!
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Review by Avari W. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I love this story and the idea behind it is amazing but I do feel like it is a little rushed and missing a few details such as emotions and maybe a description of The Apparition's face. I recommend describing any terror or anger she felt when he pulled off her hood and maybe slight shock when they discover he is an angel but that might just be me (etc.). Keep up the great work!
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