Hello, orange1. I know it is quite late, but I just found your piece. Congratulations on your win.
It's a great piece inspired by the photo, although it describes only the woman., with a good twist in the end.
I really liked it. I hope we'll talk again. Congratulations.
Very sensitive, heart breaking poem. If it is a true story for you, writing helps and the love will always remain in your heart. It brings out great emotion and if it isn't,'t a true story, you have captured the feelings very accurately. The only thing that was a little off for me, was the title. You cannot understand from the title that it is such a sensitive poem, and maybe it won,'t attract too much attention. Feel free to ignore my comment if you don't like it.
Also, check out my portfolio and if you like it, please consider giving me your vote in the "newbies in the spotlight" contest.
Keep writing and let me know if you write something new.
Hi, again, ruth. On this piece, the last line has made all the difference. I would never have thought of that, and reading your pieces, you surprised me! It's a very good story, with an unexpected twist at the end. I'd expect you 'd had won with this piece. Anyway, great job. Keep on. We'll talk again.
Hi, Sara. I don't think I have enough words to describe the impact this poem has. I read it three times to connect it with the title, and every time i found something new I had missed and it suddenly all made sense. it deserved to win.
I have a short story "domestic violence". Though they are similar, I think yours is a lot subtler and has a greater impact. I became a fan of yours. Let me know when you have something new. I'll be glad to read it.
Hello, Ruth, how are you? We haven't spoken since "let's went", but I found now your short stories. It's a very interesting and very sensitive story and unfortunately happens a lot more than we think. You presented it very nicely, making us despise the lady even from the first few lines. The highlight was the last line with the applause :)
I ll read the rest of your stories and get back to you. Also, i' d like to ask you to check my port, and if you like it consider giving me your vote in the " newbies in the spotlight" contest. Thank you. We ll talk again. Susan ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Hi, valleyboy, how are you? you keep writing interesting things, and i am glad you tried something different this time. The interesting concept here is that, while you touch a very delicate subject- somebody with alzheimer's probably- you are presenting it in a humorous way that I guess is not insulting to anyone. well done, once again. Drop me a note when you write something new. It' s a pleasure reading your pieces. We'll talk again. Susan
Great twist. Would never think of it. As you can understand, I am checking your whole portfolio and enjoying it too much. I became a fan of yours. Keep on. Be well. Susan
Hi, Joe, how are you? Nice story. I especially liked the ending, with the double message of the word tone, both musical and attitude. I could understand you would write some thing about music, but I couldn't know what. Very clever. Good luck at the contest. For now it's just you and me. We ll talk again. Susan
Hi, Sara. I was searching for something to read and found your port. I am glad i did. What a lovely and sensitive poem this is. I liked the emotion it brought, and the fact that it ended with the third verse. It felt like a full circle closing. It describes a very vivid image and I liked it. We ll talk again. Have a nice day. Susan
Hi, Valleyboy. You are a boy, right? :)
"To just get taller girls" Amazing! I don't think anyone ever thought of that.
How do you manage to make all of them rhyme? I am impressed, maybe because I don't have a clue about poetry. :)
Talk to you again.
Hello, Valleyboy, how are you doing? We have "spoken" before, I am a fan of yours that likes Barry Manilow :).
I read this new poem. You are really brilliant! I started laughing about midway through the poem and it was hilarious reading the end.
I was thinking that maybe he boarded a ship full of pirates or something, but Titanic I did not expect.
Very funny. I will keep reading your poems and you'll probably get more reviews from me.
Why don't you enter a newbie's poetry contest? I'm pretty sure you'll do great.
We'll talk again.
If you feel like it, check the newbies in the spotlight contest in which I am taking part. Thanks.
Very touching and so sad. It really got me thinking. Of all the things that I may do that are not great and may cause a little child to feel so bad.
Thank you for sharing such a beautiful poem.
The most powerful lines to me are these: "Public displays of affection,
private displays of decay." So simple, yet so true sometimes.
Hi, Max, it's not been long since we talked.
I saw this new piece of yours. It's fast and clever and it's got very vivid dialogue.
The only thing that confused me were the names. For some reason, I thought Dee was the girl and Rocky the boy, whereas it was the other way around :) It confused me a little, but I guess that's just me. It's not a problem with the story. We'll talk again.
Have a nice day.
Oh, you are good! You are really good! I just sent you a review on "the soldier". Then I found this. It's almost hilarious and I didn't see it coming until I read the last line. I liked it very much, and I especially liked the fact that it rhymes. If you have anything else, send me a mail. I'd like to read more from you. Bye!
Hello valleyboy. I read your bio and your poem. It definitely raised more than a smile, reding this humorous poem. It is very well written, starts out a bit melodramatic, then you think it's going to be a horror poem, and it finally ends with a funny image of the soldier. The final blow, though, that made me laugh, was the name of the singer :)
Although I must admit that I like Barry Manilow ;)
Still, it was very funny. Keep writing.
Hello, hj_han90. I liked your piece very much. It is very true, very honest and has a hint of melancholy. I don't know if this a true story, but if it is, it's proof that mothers know better, even if they don't really know all the details. I especially liked the sequence in which you expanded your description of your day. It is indeed what we have to do when we write; write details and keep people interested.
Have a nice day
Hi, Max, welcome to WDC. I just read your piece. I liked it's meaning and the message it gives. Some lines are a bit confusing, but the general idea is one that I agree with. I liked the funny lines you wrote: "The interpretation carried so much power as to push those who think otherwise into a closet, explaining why homosexual individuals are so fabulously dressed when they come out" and "wouldn’t it be better to love them in the bedroom instead of the closet?". Keep writing.
Hello, C.Rose. I finished reading your piece, and it feels too real. Very moving, very heart-breaking, too.
Just by reading the first few lines, you get the impression that something is about to go wrong. And it does.
It's a very honest and vivid description of the feelings these kids must have, and you are left with the feeling of helplessness.
I liked the way it is set up, too. It gave me the impression of getting down a staircase or something, is it what you mean with the shape you made? I would really like to know, if you 'd like.
I found it very sensitive and I really liked it. Have a nice day.
Very nice, indeed. At first I was confused by the title, but by the end it all made sense
It made me smile, with the obviously relaxed and understanding couple, and I liked that it ended with let's went. I think maybe I will use it, too, when I speak, if you don't mind...Just kidding. I really liked it.
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