Very well written! This is the first piece of your's that I have read. This one chapter makes me want to read the beginning of your story and anything thing else that you have written. Your characters are unique and believable. Your descriptive talent is wonderful. The whole chapter is full of surprises and climaxes. I enjoyed reading it very much. I did notice spaceing errors. (Double spacing - like this, instead of like this.) Other than that, great story. Write on!
Oh my goodness! For the sake of all readers every where, publish this work. It was absolutely amazing. I sat here glued to my computer screen waiting to find out just how Brandon would find out he switched places with Julie and how he would then convince his wife Karen it was true. I gasped as you so perfectly discribed the truck running over that small child. A tear came to my eye as I read that Brandon "slowly lift Mr. Duck to his face and breathed deeply, filling his lungs with his final breath". Seemply mesmerizing and real throughout the entire piece. Bravo! The only thing that bothered me was that it leaves you hanging about the doctor wanting to see Brandon about his test results. But other than that...WOW!
Praise God! Isn't it amazing what God can do with our messes. My story is quite the same and I am unbelievably grateful to His mercy. Hold on to the truth and stay in the light. May God bless you and lead you always.
Your Sister in Christ
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