There was definitely some pretty funny stuff here. I love the Hensons and Star killing them off just for funzies. This plot line is really inventive and I literally laughed out loud at the term "unalive". I like the little outtakes where the characters are thinking about something off to side & even more so when another character has "seen" what they were thinking about. I don't know if you watch Family Guy but those outtakes make the whole show for me.
Star is a great lead character, so self-involved and oblivious to everything around him. Kirk on steroids... and I mean that in a good way. From what I can tell the Angela character is more serious and there to balance him out. You might consider using her a little more. With all the goofballs running the show, The Sexy Beast needs a level headed chick to keep them in check. Just my take on it.
Good job & I look forward to reading more.
take care
april
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