This was a very good story! Its very realistic and easy to follow. Anyone who has ever been in love or had a crush can't defiently understand this story!
This poem was good. I thought it was going to be about a man loving a women but in fact it was more like a man loving the male population. Personally, as a women i was a little offeneded, but I see that men and women differ and that in some ways a man can handle things better then women can.
Really good poem. I like how it starts off so sweet and loving and happy and then turns out being sad, but she made her decision to be with a rich man and not have love. I feel bad for whoever was the other person. My favorite stanza is the last one because it truely describes this person. Good job, keep writing!
This last line that says "Because of you I am dead". It really confused me because is this person literally dead or is it just an exaggeration? I feel like the line that says "My heart once beat slow" sounds a little confusing. I feel like if it was slowly instead of slow it would be more understanable. These two lines "I’ve locked my heart inside this box
So you cannot rip it out again –" were really good to me because I could feel the pain. The title "My Heart Belongs To You" made me think this was going to be a happy love story but really its not. Now after reading this poem it kind of confuses me because if this persons heart belongs to someone else then why have they put their heart in a box so the other person can't hurt them anymore? I feel like the title needs to be changed to fit the poem better. Overall I think this poem was pretty good. While I was reading the poem I could feel the pain this person had and it was pretty relatable. I do think their are some changes that need to be made but not everythings perfect! I think there was good imagery but you could have used more. But I do like this poem. It was very well constructed and for the most part easy to read. Good job!
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