Beautifully articulated and descriptive! Your writing is very natural and atmospheric. The twist was perfect, I didn't see it coming at all. I only have minor quibbles: The tense, I feel in some parts using the past instead of present would fit better. The other is that Hild sees the Elvenking "up close", but doesn't notice his eyes until the end.
This piece really transported me to a different time - which is saying something because my parents were born that year! The writing is articulate and descriptive without being wordy or repetitive. I love the way you described the naivete and excitement of going to a concert at that age. Also, I lived in Houston for some years, so your mention of the Astrodome brought back fond memories!
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