Hi Snow Lake I read your short story .Sounds very nice to me. It's clear, to the point and sounds like you did alot of work on it. I don't think anything needs to be changed or removed. Sounds perfect. Great job Snow. Keep on writing.
Hi , How are you doing. I read your story and I think it sounds pretty good . It's to the point and it has a very nice , smooth flow to it too. You did a great job on it. Very realistic too. Nice work. Keep on writing and you'll go far.
Very nice poem , It has a very nice, smooth flow to it. Tho I did'nt understand very much of what it was saying I still think you did a nice job writing it. And as always I am willing to show how much I like your poems by giving you 5 stars. Keep Writing.
Hi , How are you doing Corwin . I read your story, it took me a little while to read but after it was worth it. It's great. It has a great flow to it, smooth and sounds pretty realistic too. You did a great job on it , keep on writing.
Hi , How are you doing ? Your article seems to be to the point and straight forward. It explains alot about the different stuff in the site and I think anybody would be able to understand it. You did a great job on it. Keep on Writing.
As of all your other poems that I read along with this one, it sounds beautiful. Sounds like alot of fun in the beginning but then got really sad in the end when your love comitted suicide. Great writting as usuall, keep up the good work.
Hi how are you doing ? I like this poem because it's a bit different from the other ones. It shows how much of nature we leave out an ignore and it also shows how much we depend on man made things soo much. It's a pity that we have such a beatiful world and we only use it to cut down trees and make paper and just to get extra land space with it. I wish other people would appriciate the wonders of nature alot more than they do now. Great poem. Keep writing.
Hi how are you doing ? I like your story. Sounds and feel like I was actually there and Of what I have read I honestly don't think anything needs to be changed.
You did a great job on it and you should be proud of yourself. Keep on writing Sandstone.
Hi, how are you doing ? I love your story alot . It Sounds great. No mistakes as what I can see, and you did a great job writing it. I loved your characters too, the story felt soo real that I got into it , like really got into it. It made me feel like I was there too. It's pretty kool. Nice job.
Wow that was long, but it was worth reading. Hi, greta job you did there on that novel. Lol I love eating pancakes myself, that pancake recipe reminds me of the pancake My mom used to make. But for the novel, great writing, sounds good and I don't think nothin needs to be changed. Keep on Writing.
Hi avant garde , how are you doing ? Well as for your poem it seems fine to me but I think your lines are a bit too long. Im not sure what style of poetry writing it is, can you tell me ? I'm new to this site and poetry writing too. But great job on the poem tho it sounds fine. Keep Writing.
Wow this poem is a bit deep. Its sounds fine to me. Doesnt seem to me like anything needs changing. But one thing tho what does this mean "My taut and narrow waist-the last and best surprise.
Your three week-old-seed, fermented between my thighs".
But for the rest of the poem it sounds fine. good job.
Very very true. This poem sounds really nice and its very to the point. It Sounds beautiful but yet still a bit sad , wishing some of it in real life could be changed. The poem has a nice flow to it. Keep on writing and you'll go far, . I love your poem.
This poem sounds great. It has a really nice, smooth flow to it. I dont think there is anything in it that needs changing either. I like the way you opened it in the beginning and carried it out through the end. Keep on writing like this and you'll go far.
Sounds like waking up late has alot of dis-advantages. It sounds fine but the only part I did'nt understand was this line "I bought a pool the dog ate up". I dont really understand that part but other than that the whole poem sounds fine. Great writing.
Sounds fine but I did'nt get what you were saying very much. Sounds to me like you were arguing with your mom. Don't worry I use to go through that all the time. But the poem sounds fine tho. Alot of anger in it too. Why so much anger ? Anyways keep on writing. great job.
It sounds good, straight forward, to the point, great flow to it. I like the way you put it, its in the right order and everything. I to honestly believe that freedom is everything to anyone, means alot to a person and I certainly can relate to this one. Keep on Writing.
This poems sounds sad and yet still it's so true. My gf just broke up with me but I'm hanging in there. this poem sounds deep and it's also to the point. If this poem is talking about you my advice is to hang in there, you'll get through and for the poem, it sounds great. Keep writing.
Take Care,
Alex.
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