A very meaningful short poem. It could be interpreted in so many ways. I interpreted it as me being the ghost and the world that cannot hear me is my past. It shows a lot of potential. I personally think two stanzas would be having a greater effect on the reader and ending both with 'for i am a Ghost, whom is not often seen or heard.' I also think that you could give all the 'I's in the poem some power as only the first one is a capital 'I'.
The story is very nicely told and it is just nice to read. The title is inspiring and attractive.
However(this is really my opinion, nothing personal), I think the use of enjambment is exaggerated.
I also really liked your use of half-rhyme, it really made the poem colourful.
The writing style is good, conveying a clear point of view of a giant teenager. Spelling is almost immaculate and grammar is outstanding. I really enjoyed the direction of the story and how all the body parts used were ordered in a neat way, making the story much easier to follow. I would work on developing his character more. Now, he seems too rushed, that's just me though. Well done.
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