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#3836645

Review of The World How It Seems

Review by alicem

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

This really moved me, it's so honest and relatable. Thank you for sharing this, it is beautifully written.

Alice :)

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#3813987

Review of The Beer Cellar

Review by alicem

Rated: E

| (4.0)

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Reading this aloud, it is clear to the reader that each phrase is full with emotion. Engagement and empathy was consequently almost on a sub-conscious level; a natural response. This is what a great writer is able to do.

If I were to say one thing, I would say be careful about rhyming the same words together. However, this could well be deliberate, and doesn't affect the feeling of the poetry at all.

Thank you for sharing this,

Alice

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#3813984

Review of Outmaneuvered

Review by alicem

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Cherry,

I really enjoyed reading this prologue. I found the writing flowed with ease and the plot was easy to understand, although the ending still leaves the reader guessing as to what could happen next. This is what a good writer does.

Where do I find the story?!

Thanks,

Alice

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#3812985

Review of Crossroads

Review by alicem

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

I love the manner and perspective from which this is written. Your writing flows very well to the reader and although a slightly more abstract plot, it is easy to follow and understand. I'm big on capturing small, seemingly insignificant details of a particular moment to create an image in the mind of the reader - and this is what you have done really well here.

If I were to make one constructive comment, I would say consider your tenses at times - for example 'I knew that when I got home something will be (would be?) wrong' and perhaps paragraphing style. However, I've had to be extremely picky here - you've done a wonderful job!

All the best,

Alice :)

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#3713060

Review of In the Moonlight

Review by alicem

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi,
I really like the way this is written; how it's short but tells its own story. If I were you, I wouldn't mention the overdose directly, because the rest of your writing is affected by that one word. Having said that, it's wonderfully written, so good job! :)

Alice

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#3664665

Review of First Dawn after the War

Review by alicem

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

The descriptions in this poem are immaculately constructed, good job!

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#3660391

Review of cycle

Review by alicem

Rated: E

| (4.5)

I really really like the message behind this poem, it comes across really well. The only thing I'd do is check the syllable counts for lines for a fluent rhyming structure :) but good job!

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