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Review of Personal Time  Open in new Window.
Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Psh as great as it was to read this, Willy, I know damn well you have even better under your pen. Bring it ;) I can't wait to read more of your work.

Also this haiku is a great mirror of your self view. Dark, deep, mildly interpersonal. Loved it but know you can do better.
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Review of Where is Summer?  Open in new Window.
Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
You managed to capture the ideas, the feelings, the creativity that all belong to summer. And I could easily feel the longing toward it.

Length and flow seemed on point. Wording was very nice.

I look forward to reading some more of your work in the future.
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Review of Wildness I Love  Open in new Window.
Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem is short, simple and packed full of imagery, inspiration and philosophy.

I actually sort of wish that it was longer just so I could read more.

If it were indeed longer, I'd say that you could go in a bit deeper to how the reflection and who you are inside can be seen by others vs self.
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Review of Stop and stare  Open in new Window.
Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
This poem is developed quite well. A few of the rhymes are a bit simplistic but the message of how much you love her is clear.

As a single mother, I feel she is very lucky to have someone love her in the way you've written. It's unbelievably sweet.
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Review of The Last Goodbye  Open in new Window.
Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Professionally: This poem is beautifully written, revealing a side to the author personally. It's a sweet, simple yet emotionally complex piece that's message is clear. I also think the phrases and way it flows are perfectly arranged.

Fan girl: Oh my god the last verse is one of the most romantic things I've ever read!
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Review of Ireland  Open in new Window.
Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Beautiful work of art.

What I loved the most in this poem is the use of imagery and how I could perfectly imagine the rolling green hills and majestic lakes of Ireland.

What I disliked the most in this poem is that some of the lines didn't sync up with others via syllables.
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Review of Moon and Sun  Open in new Window.
Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I absolutely adore your analogy of father sun and mother moon. I find that it's indeed very fitting to those figures.

The poem is rather sweet and written well.
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Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem is composed quite beautifully and the message in it seems to be very inspirational.

I'm normally against repetition but it works nicely in this piece.
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Review of Lost Love  Open in new Window.
Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the style in which you worded everything. The flow and rhyme made everything seem like a romantic longing. The sorrow wasn't too dark which made it nice to read.

The last verse seemed a bit rushed to me for some reason though.


P.S: I read it in Johnny Deeps voice.
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Review of Apocalypse Song  Open in new Window.
Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I think your word usage is very complex and quite beautiful. It's fantastic use of imagery as well.

In the third verse I find that it becomes a bit repetitive with the word 'and' but aside from that excellent work!
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Review of Just a Touch  Open in new Window.
Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
A beautiful poem of lovely praise. I Think you nailed how most women wish to be complimented.

In all honesty, this poem would make a lovely wedding vow.

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Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I feel a bit mixed on my feelings of this excerpt.

On the pro side, that quote that the main character says is unbelievably powerful and romantic. I'm not one to usually enjoy first person novels but I just might be able to get into this.

On the con side, I think that you start too many sentences with 'And'. It becomes a bit repetitive.

I am also working on a novella/novel that I hope to get published by the end of the year. We as authors have to be of two different faces - one being emotional with the creation we make to nurture it to our standards but also once being of the publishing organization that puts it at the standards of higher ups.

I wish you luck with your novel!
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Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I have got to say this poem is really good. I can never get my poems to flow so nicely when they rhyme. It's a skill.

And though a bit dark, in a good way, it's full of undeniable truth. This specific poem is almost like a blast from the past for me. Starting at a young age I started to self harm, to the point that I almost killed myself. Thankfully I got out of that and have been clear for 5 years, around the time I got pregnant with my son. But one of the largest problems that caused it was lack of communication to my parents, the void of closeness.

And "don't romanticize self harm" is important. It's a message many don't understand.

I think I got off topic a bit lol. This piece isn't just a story that sounds nice, it's a lesson on a serious topic.

Good job. Keep up the good work.
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Review of Metamorphosis  Open in new Window.
Review by Alissa Rose Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
"finding my own wings will carry me
where others have not flown."

I think this is one of the most beautiful phrases in this poem. The wording, the feeling all seems perfect. The poem as a whole is also very nice but I love this phrase the absolute most. I also feel that the whole idea of someone growing and struggling to become something better, with a past to overcome is very true for many people which makes it easy for others to relate to.

Please keep up the good work.
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