Though short looks impressive with the way it is conveyed. This story can be connected to many daily incidents that happens around all which may go on even without noticed. This story contains some authentic element which is the soul of this story. The way the protagonist explains his nostalgic flashback memories and his affection to his daughter is highlighed so amazingly. The ending of the story is quite interesting or a twist that cannot be imagined by a reader. Well penned.
This is something more than a story. I can sense the smell of many tears of many parents and elders who is badly longing to stay with their dear and near. This story is a complete mixture of real life situations where the mental agony of many people of different circumstances can be seen with the unseen cry within them. Here a person who has to overcome the society to get into their natural life facing many problems though looks common but heart piercing is highlighted very well. This is a work which can be a touching one for any reader of any standard. An amazing authentic work.
A great theme of love and affection of a mother is conveyed in this poem. The title is suitable as it is highlighting the cause of the entire poem. A mother who is unable to look after her kid in a fair way is giving her baby to somebody else who is in a better and well settled position. And later in each step of her life she is mourning thinking of her lost baby gifted to her by the god.
The poem spreads the message of pure love and affection of a mother who cannot stand the pain of losing the child even if the kid is in a well settled family with all prosperities.
The only suggestion I could highlight is to improve the diction and its connection in a better manner through which a well penned work will evolve.
A good poem with a fresh theme.Keep going on.
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