nice try...the last second stanza is very well written but the ideas are scattered so it is tough to gather the whole theme...let your emotions be more clear and I suggest you not to follow a rhyme scheme its easier and better that way if you have recently started poetry...good job
it is not necessary for u to follw a defenite rhyme scheme...its a nice attempt bt try not to incorporate unnecessary things...you have reffered to the heart as mighty, melancholic and majestic...wonderful use of alliteration however in the 3rd stanza one is unable to reason why the heart is majestic...so work on the third para...good attempt!!
Printed from https://shop.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/alphascora/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/2
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.18 seconds at 12:35am on Jul 01, 2024 via server web1.