Although I do not often write uniform poems or ones that rhyme, I do like to see such poems. This is such a poem that I think is awesome. The feeling behind the words is apparent and it warms my heart to see such love. Although i think there needs to be more variety in the Rhymes. For example the do - you rhyme is repeated quite often and the Penultimate verse's together and together seem a rather bad rhyme, and the Skies and smiles do not rhyme. However sorry for being so negative, I think its a wonderful piece of writing and im not sure if having the entire thing rhyming was your intention or not but still I feel this is a great and emotional piece of writing and i enjoyed reading it! Thank you for writing it!
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