I really enjoyed this. You seem to have captured this character correctly without making him a Gary-Stu -- he had flaws and good points. He is hiding from the fact that he is getting old, like someone I know *glares at my mother*. I would've liked to have heard more about Dan, the character speaking in the beginning. And thirty doesn't actually seem like that old.
All around, a great story. I really enjoyed it!
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