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What I liked most/least: This certainly held my interest from the beginning to the end.
Summary: The feelings I had while reading this was one of the bittersweet love this person had for his wife of so many years. Though they had been married forty years the love he expressed was young and passionate. The ending was wonderful! I didn't know if I should laugh or cry, and actually I felt both. Thank you for sharing this and please keep writing.
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What I liked most/least: I enjoyed the introduction that set the stage for your words.
Summary: This held my interest from the beginning to the end. I liked the sincerity of the words facing some difficult problems with determination. Standing up for what we believe was captured in your words of a fighter for life. I had the feeling of satisfaction with the ending and liked it very much. You did a good job of expressing determination and hope. Please keep writing.
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What I liked most/least: I liked the idea of relating life and love to a living thing such as the leaf. I found the very first sentence a little hard to understand. Are you saying a leaf is "like" love and life? I wondered if there was a word missing?
Summary: The concept of the life and death of a leaf is just as it is with life and love. They both are alive with color and they both will die. I liked the thought at the end of things becoming new again. I enjoyed the thought behind this and hope you keep on writing.
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Overall Impression/Suggestions: I read this several times to fully grasp what your words said. Once I got it, I really liked it.
What I liked most/least: I liked the line when she slapped your hand away and said enough. This gave me an impression of attitude.
Summary: I liked this more as I re-read it. Your description of the dragon lady left me with the feeling she had power and I would not want to look in her eyes. I enjoyed this little fantasy and the escape it gave for a moment. Thank you for sharing this and please keep writing.
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Overall Impression/Suggestions: You expressed some very strong feelings with few word.
Summary: I felt joined to your words. I was left with the feeling of being bound, trapped really with no hope of escape. The statements were powerful in their simplicity. This stands on its own and I enjoyed it very much. I wondered if you could also use it to be a beginning of a more in depth writing. It is just my thought. Thank you for sharing this and please keep writing.
Hi, I offer these comments with a perspective as individual as I am. It is my desire to give feedback that will be honest, helpful and with encouragement to please keep writing! Overall Impression/Suggestions: I felt drawn into a feeling of longing and emotions of sadness and missing someone. What I liked most/least: I liked the way you described this person may be locked away but can not be taken from you. Summary: This was sad but sounded true to life. You created a picture of someone that in this persons eyes had value and worth. This was done by painting another picture different than others see of this person. You gave a different view. Please keep writing. Angels Mom
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Hi, I offer these comments with a perspective as individual as I am. It is my desire to give feedback that will be honest, helpful and with encouragement to please keep writing!
Overall Impression/Suggestions: This writing has a very strong message. One others will be able to relate to.
What I liked most/least: I liked the way you moved from dragging up the past to changing, then you carefully pack up the past and look back at the girl you used to be. This left me with the feeling of pain of the past, to working on the present then to hope. Did I get it right?
Summary:I was impressed with the flow and choice of your words. This held my interest and I felt the hope in the last part that states, you need them less and less. The ending was great! I will look forward to reading more so please keep up the good work and keep writing.
Hi, I offer these comments with a perspective as individual as I am. It is my desire to give feedback that will be honest, helpful and with encouragement to please keep writing! Overall Impression/Suggestions: The message of our salvation is presented in a clear and beautiful way with your words.
What I liked most/Least: I liked "the treasured sacrifice of the Mighty Jesus!" and had the feeling of gratitude when reading it.
Summary: This was an inspiring poem and I found it uplifting to read. With the statements of truth you have created a beautiful picture of God's gift to us. Thank you for sharing this and please keep writing.
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Overall Impression/Suggestions: First impression is this is short and the words are direct and relay a clear message.
What I liked most/least: I thought the message of hope in the first part and the warning in the second part was very clear. This had a nice flow but there was one line that did not flow as well, "Going to heaven is life that is brand new" It seemed to flow better for me when I read it without the word "that".
Summary: I really enjoyed this short expressive poem. Thank you for sharing it and please keep writing.
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What I liked most:"I loved I lost"
I think most people have been there, many times. I liked the simplicity of the words and felt the power of them.
"I loved I lost" I like to think that just because I loved I have gained even though there is loss. This is just a personal feeling on the words that do not affect my opinion that this is a great writing!
Summary:I like this. It is short but speaks with volume. The message is strong and when I read it understand the times when we need help the most is also the times we block or prevent the very help we need.
I look forward to reading more of your words so please keep writing.
Angels Mom
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Overall Impression:
If I could have said good bye to my grandmother it may have gone much like the words you have shared here. You convinced me of the conflict in this mans heart. He wanted to remember her as he had known her and not the way she had become through no fault of her own.
What I liked most: I liked "she remembered me long enough" and when the voice of fear spoke it was silenced by declaring the truth. He stood firm in his knowledge she loved him.
Summary: This is something many can relate to. You have done a good job in describing the emotional pain from the grandchilds point of view.Thank you for sharing this. Please keep writing.
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Overall Impression: A moment of truth is captured and a picture of your beautiful sister is created with your words.
Suggestions: None.
What I liked most: The awful moment came and you describe it as "she was gone" and left you and this world but you go on to say she "left this world to be somewhere else" and you can hear her laugh and see her smile. This is very touching and leaves a bittersweet memory.
Summary: I was captured by the moment as you open with her putting her lip stick on and felt I was there. The truth of what she suffered and the great loss not only to the sister, but the world was very clear. I felt the warmth and love expressed flow freely and the memory of her smile is left in my mind.
Thank you so much for sharing this and please keep writing. I look forward to reading more.
Hello, my review is to give you my honest opinion, realizing everyone has one and mine is just that, one. As it is my desire to grow and learn I hope you find something in this review that will give you insight, encouragement and to please keep writing!
Overall Impression: Wanting to go where the daffodils grow is the thought/feeling I had when I read this. Thinking of the yellow daffodils in the field was very appealing.
Suggestions: I stumbled just a little when I got to "The field is nothing but daffodils." The picture was beautiful though.
What I liked most: What I liked most is a little harder with this one...as there are many lines I like...the melody of the wind blowing as the daffodils dance made me smile and found myself going back to those words.
Summary: The beginning is what drew me in toward the field of daffodils...the little boy was unexpected and very nice. I could almost feel the flowers on the palms of my hands as he touched them. This is a very nice poem...it brought a smile to my heart. Thank you for sharing it and please keep writing!
I enjoyed this write! This made me smile as it expresses how I feel much of the time. You did a good job and this held my interest to the last word. I like the way you brought out that decisions not only affect us but others as well and the decisions we make will be judged, which makes deciding harder! This made me smile and I thank you for sharing it. I look forward to reading more so please keep writing. Angels Mom
I enjoyed the way this caught me up in the colorful picture of your words. Through the description of nature I felt I was moving within and to each paragraph. I especially enjoyed the last one and the picture of earth as "her" and moon as "his" and the freedom of dancing until in a daze. Keep up the nice writing. Angels Mom
As I can see, many before me has read this and appreciated it for the great writing it is. Thank you so much for sharing this amazing story. It has lifted my spirit today and John 14:2 is a scripture often quoted in my heart. Angels Mom
I enjoyed the way this writing causes me to think of all the "little" things we tend to overlook and take for granted. Thank you for sharing this and the insight you have shown for the many faces of God, He is in all things and the encouragement and challenge to see this was presented very well. Thank you for the insight and I look forward to reading more. Angels Mom
I like the way with the suggestion I could see myself fall asleep and hear the bird praising God. In the praises pointing out all I have and take for granted. Yes, a birds eye view could benefit us all. I liked the flow of the words in the first two parts of this and felt the second was not quite as smooth but this is great. Thank you for the insight and please keep writing. Angels Mom
I really enjoyed the personal, heart felt touch you gave such a serious topic. The interaction between the mother and child was easy to read and see. The questions and possibilities that you leave open in this story is frightening. You gave just enough information to bring me to only imagine the rest of the story. Keep writing. Angels Mom
A message of hope and comfort in times of peace and times of trouble. I especially liked the way this took me from angels watching and helping extended loved ones to personal times of need and then helping us if we fall. The last two lines a message of hope that when it is time to leave here, we will not be alone but "lift you up to heaven, on their wings". Thank you so much for the inspiration in your words. Angels Mom
This sounds like a good holiday to me! It is a good description of the past, (really our present) and looking toward the future. I feel like it had a nice flow to it until I got to the very last verse. The last verse did not seem as smooth as the rest. I enjoyed this very much and you followed through with the thought well. Thank you for sharing it. Keep writing and I look forward to reading more. Angels Mom
Life...the thoughts that run through the mind may seem random but in reality they go where the memory leads. This took me in many directions with each verse. I especially like...Peacekeepers, Lovers, Workers, Fighters and the concept of each. And are we not all of these depending on the day, hour or moment of time?
Thank you for sharing this. Please keep writing, I look forward to reading more.
Angels Mom
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