Very true, very, very true! Although I think we can hold the 'sensationalised' media partially responsible, as they spread the idea. The only thing I would say is that Wikipedia doesn't make sense, it's not seen as a opinion thing, more a factual resource, so I wouldn't recommend using that in this context. Apart from that, I really liked it and you have a great use of language!
Interesting, I wonder if it is written from a man or woman's perspective. It tells a great story but seeing as it is narrative poetry, I would recommend giving some more background- why he/she is in the hospital, what they did etc. Nice job, though!
I like it! It's interesting and a very comfortable read. You do a good job of explaining your characters in a way that makes them feel real and it helped me to make connections with the story. A few things, at the beginning you have 'cc' before It and you repeat the last part three times over. I would recommend looking at that. Other than that, this was a great story and I wanted to thank you for sharing it with us.
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