This is pretty good so far! I think it could definitely use a little more editing, though. On your fourth to last line, you spelled thought incorrectly. After you edit it, just let me know so that I can take another look at it, if you'd like
It's a very interesting piece... definitely a different take on cancer, as most fictional stories about cancer have the character as someone more quiet and lonesome. On line4, I think it should be" to give color to my skin," not, "to give my color to my skin." Also, you spelled again wrong on line5.
THIS IS AMAZING!!!! I am in love with this poem... I'm definitely a fan of yours... PLEASE keep writing and reading and doing what you just did (which is writing an amazing poem).
Audreyb
I love this! I will admit that the blue ribbon attracted me, as I think in color most of the time... But it was worth the time I spent clicking on it and much, much more! I like your word choice and find the word calamity very pleasing...
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