At first when I saw the title I half expected this to be the stereotypical "Buried Alive" scenario presented as always in the form of an urban legend about an old lady in a coma, however your story was a pleasant surprise. I found it faintly reminescent of the twilight zone because of the fact that the people enjoy something that turns out to be something much more horrific than what they see. My one critique is you are very vague on who the character victimizes and targets. Yes, I know it probably makes for a better effect without all the detail, but perhaps a slight hint would be nice. Other than that I love your story! :)
This was a nice light-hearted story that I really loved. Your story didn't include that much detail, but when it was used it was in the most effective places. I also really liked the way you made the couple play off each other, which added a nice layer of realism. Good Job :)
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