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Review of Trapped  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Pretty good description of the dilemma in which modern mankind finds themselves.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very good description of a lost soul.

Lost in its own selfishness.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
A lot of fun.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Pretty interesting.

Could put out existence into prospective!

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Review of The Literarian  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good.

Shows the frustration when someone tries to become 'somebody'.

Also shows how false religions grow.
Everyone gets angry with me when I speak of 'false religions'.
I guess I am like Matt Thompson in that way - I have found my protagonist situation.
Just that I am not tring to be 'somebody', I am just trying to glorify God!

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Review of Love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good.

Expresses the feeling of a girl/woman very well (though I am not a woman).
Not meant as criticism, but this is the longest poem I ever read.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Pretty good.

I have no suggestions for improvement - (unexpected don't you think?)

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Pretty good fantasy.

Strange story but now a days, everything is turned up side down.
What used to be true is now thought to be false and vice versa.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Pretty good.

The eternal cycle of life is depicted.
it's too bad you don't talk about another man doing the same things the first man did under the new tree which is feeding off the corpse of the first man.

I like this a lot!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Pretty good.

It seems to be a poem about an absentee father (like so many fathers are today).

Fathers today seem to have no time for their offspring. Talk about a sad situation!

Their living is more sad than their dieing.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting!

I am suprized you don't go into the measurments of how to arive at 'half full or half emty '.
Are there a few more or less moicules, either way, which make it for ever not half anything?

When you go into the 'perfect lady friend', let me clue you in.
There is no such animal.
I have been married for 51 years and if perfection is all that holds marrage together,
we would have been divorced 15 minutes into the marrrage.
(Not that we are bad people - just not perfect!)

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Pretty good.

Two minor suggestions:

If it were me, I would arrrange the lines into stanzas,
or at least only double space between lines instead of triple space.

There are a few ' i ' which should be capitalized.
I notice many writers don't capitalize the ' i '.
This may be a generation gap thing.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very good.

Not much I can add.

A very minor thing - the animals go to caves - - to hide their shame
Interesting concept.
I don''t think animals have any shame - that's what separates human kind from animals.
We have lots of shame and lots to be ashamed about!

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Review of Garden gnome  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Pretty good.

I think the story needs more explaination of what is happening at the end.

The line below seems to be incomplete.

It was more like a china doll than to that of a cheap, plastic figure.

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Review of Rest In Peace.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Pretty good.
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Review of Gone  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Pretty good.
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Review of Imagination  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Pretty good.

This is a plaintive cry of all humanity.

Some of us find a soul mate who helps in this quest but most don't!

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Review of Life and Loss  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Pretty good.

Describes a life of hopelessness that many have.

I suggest separating some of the long stanzas into stanzas of four lines throughout the poem.
The lines are already set up in ideas of four lines.

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Review of Scooter Baby  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Interesting story.

Describes the downsizing of America.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Pretty good.

In the following line I am not sure if it is a mistake or is intentional. If it intentional, I would put a comma between, like so:
'dance over, dance over'
But that's just me!

Rays of light dance over dance over the magnificent giants,

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Fair poem.

Not too much passion or interest is developed. Almost 'Who cares?'


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Review of Birthday poem  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Pretty interesting.

So many people today want to forget about God.
I guess this because they don't want to be dependant on Him or responsible to Him.

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Review of Dream  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Pretty good.

It's too bad these kinds of feelings can't go on throughout the relationship but alas these feeling wane after a few years.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Not too bad.

I suggest one small change to help with the rythm:

On one certain day
He got up to say "Hey!

I can't agree with the sentment that 'Life's supposed to be a party!'
But that's neither here nor there.

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Review of His Death  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very good.

It's what Jesus came to earth to do!

The only thing I might suggest - - dad should be capitalized, because it refers to God.

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