Before initially reading your essay, the title resonated with me. I can never seem to find the right person either.
I noticed a few grammatical mistakes within the text. Other than that, I commend you on your ability to resonate with the reader and show them how much you hurt through the words you write.
Keep going and someday you'll meet the right person. Someday, love will find a way.
Upon reading your emotional poem I thought of someone I lost a year and some months ago; my mother. I haven't been to her grave since we buried her, but I know when I do go back it'll be quite emotional as well. You have my sympathy. I know all to well the pain of losing someone so close.
Your poem is intensely personal. I felt like I was intruding upon your grief while I read it. Though I seen a few errors, I would like to commend you on your ability to transfer the impact of your grief upon the reader. I would like to suggest maybe eliminating the repetitious personal pronoun + verb situation that we poets find ourselves stuck in. Instead of saying I did.. or I was.. I need.. maybe eliminate the personal pronoun, maybe find some way to write the thought and use "I" scarcely.. Your poem will flow better that way. Believe me, I have this problem too.
Your poem broke my heart. I always cry when dogs are involved. Be it movies, books, poems, or real life I cry like a baby. The effect your poem has is a sentimental effect. I can almost feel the sorrowful happiness at having such a great friend and watching him pass on. This is extremely well written. There are only a few mistakes that I see.
Wow. Let me first commend you on such a beautifully dark poem. I wish I could say easy it is to come back from such a difficult frame of mind but I find it isn't. Speaking from someone who has been that low it is easy to write from pain, but hard to convey that emotion in a poem. You did it especially well. This is a marvelous poem.
I found this to be quite beautiful! I thoroughly enjoyed the organization of the poem and how the rhyme scheme never diverges. Quite a wonderful piece of poetry!
I must admit, this was a bit difficult to read. Your sentence structure is off. You have run-on sentences, comma splices, a lack of punctuation, and the story reads a bit boring. I would suggest http://jerz.setonhill.edu/writing/creative1/shorts... this is a great resource for helping those who like to write creatively. Remember: we all struggle with writing so don't be discouraged. Writing is an art-form. It takes plenty of practice to write well. I hope this helps. Please feel free to contact me if you need help.
This poem was very inspirational! It really helps one to see their place in the world is objective. We see what we want to see, not necessarily what we have to see. I especially enjoyed the organization of it. Your lines are neat and grammatically correct. I would suggest maybe eliminating the word "so." The two times you use it are too close to one another to where it sounds a bit repetitive. I would suggest something like "As you see,..." I hope this helps!
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