Good poem in my opinion ... I can relay to this, understand this feelings ... a little improvement in the flow I think would be necessary ... I made some suggestions regarding this, but it's your choice :
I feel so lonely now.
just empty inside
i try to ease my thoughts
Can't seem to figure how
at night when im alone
i STILL find myself cryin
you swear you love me dearly
its obvious you're lyin
the pain you've scarred my heart with
has caused me much aggression
the way you ripped it open
has led to dangerous depression
im searchin for the answers
AND askin my heart why
how could love have lived here
and then suddenly die
Other than that it's good. Keep on writing. A good thing about pain or suffering is that they are a good source of inspiration.
Check out my other lyrics if you'd like. Keep the spirit alive!
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