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Review by Beniah C. Lanoue
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Absolutely love this it was great especially the beast saying "don't get personal". It captures the frustration of the character really well! There a reason just a few grammatical errors to be aware of "dieing" is actually meant to be spelled with a 'y' "dying". Also in the last sentence of the first paragraph the letter 's' would need to be added to the words stick and take.Finally I would say look into changing the word meaninglessnesses, ithe seems a little out of place and awkward considering the use of the word "meaning" twice before in the same paragraph. This was a great idea and would love to see more like this! Keep it up 😊👍
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