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Review by barrmenar
Rated: E | (3.0)
nice emotional poem; sounds like you're in love with someone special.
Some housekeeping needed: There hand=their hand (possesive), a float=afloat, special. keep it neat!
One of the most important things about writing is "honesty" and your poem comes across as being straight from the heart.
Well done.
Barr
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Review by barrmenar
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the rhythm of this poem and the story. Well done.
Thank you, Barr
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Review by barrmenar
Rated: E | (3.5)
I like your poem but was not going to rate it because I don't like giving a negtive comment, so please take it with a couple of grains of salt- whatever that means.
I've reached the age where I understand every word and I think the flow is good.
The rhyming scheme however needs some work.
This is a good read that can only come from a mature perspectiove; thank you.
Barr
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Review of Ghost Train  
Review by barrmenar
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Great story poem with a GREAT RHYTHM; I love it.
I read it out loud several times to get the rhythm and the story swells when I do.
It took me several tries to get 4 down. One and (g)one are spelt the same but do not sound the same.
Great poem, thanks for the read.
Barr
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Review by barrmenar
Rated: E | (3.5)
I think you have captured that 'freshness' of new love in your poem; well done.
Your or You're that is the question.
Barr
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Review of Was There  
Review by barrmenar
Rated: E | (3.5)
I like this poem. It reveals the inner and outer man in a truthful and thoughtful way.
Well done.
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