Interesting to see where others are from, though I might have narrowed it down a bit more. For instance, America New England, Northern States, Southern States, Midwest, West Coast, Europe - England, Ireland, Scotland, etc. But it is fascinating to see where others hail from, isn't it?
This has the makings of being a good story, but it's all over the place and I found it rather hard to follow. There were quite a few typos as well. Sometimes it helps if before you submit it, you walk away for a short time, and then come back and read it as if someone else wrote it. I find this helpful. Keep writing!
I like this a lot. It kind of spoke to me. There were just two small spelling errors: convinient is spelled convenient, and shaddow is shadow. Other than that, it is a beautiful poem.
Bettyc
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