Feel like your vernacular style shined in the last few sentences. Take a glance through that part and see if you can't add some of that to your beginning. Nice little inner monologue and as some strong symbolism. Keep writing!
Nice simple little from a dad to his son. The message is to he point. Wish I knew some background into how he managed to become incarcerated. Some spelling and grammar issues, but overall it is a great piece of micro fiction. Keep writing!
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