To be honest, when I first started reading this I thought you wouldn't be able to pull it off. Let me explain why.
First of all, I rarely ever see anyone attempt to write a sonnet anymore. To me, it's a rare treat to see someone try to write a sonnet. However most of the time I come across one, it's not very well written. So I was two lines in thinking you wouldn't be able to pull it off, and I was totally wrong!
You actually know what you're doing when you write one of these and that's a rare talent that very few people have anymore.
I really love this work and the way it was written. I automatically identified with this piece as the character underneath the mask. Then I started asking myself what the person may be thinking or feeling as they "climb the never-ending stairs." I feel like a lot of people are forced to live behind masks due to pressures brought on by society.
Where you wrote
"Underneath that forced mask
society pushes unto us..."
It looks like you may feel the same way I do. However I may be wrong. You wrote this so that it can be interpreted a few different ways, so more people could identify with it.
Anyways, I feel like this was very well-written. Amazing job.
I love this piece and everything about it.
This may sound crazy but it may be because I'm oddly close to the project. See, I've tried to write something like this before but I couldn't get it going in the direction I wanted it to. Like the first 4 lines; I've tried working with that concept before.
For example:
"You never spoke, but I hear you."
or something like
"We never met, but I know you" OR
"We never met, but I love you" depending on what exactly you're writing about.
Anyways, like I said, I LOVE this and the way you wrote it. I feel like you pulled off something I was unable to.
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