I am not a writer or expert in poetry, so I can only say how it made me, personally, feel as I read it. I felt as if I was transported in a nostalgic journey. Like I should sigh and slightly smile at the end, like one dies when remembering things from long ago.
You have a nice concept here. I tend to only want to give positive reviews, but I think you might want to find a beta reader or two. Someone whose opinion you can accept and who will be honest with you, without just shredding the work. Again, the concept is good, but the way it is presented could use some work. I have often had that issue myself over the years.
Nice flash. Gives just enough info to draw in the reader, set the mood, and then the twist at the end, not only changes the tone but in conjunction with the earlier mood-setting, lets you know this has been going on for a long time. It would be interesting to see what kind of world and situations could be developed in a longer version.
Ah, the power of imagination! And the frustrations of those who are lacking in such. It goes to show that inspirations can come from anywhere. It would be interesting to see this made into a much fuller story, instead of just a flash. I always go into reading things with the expectation that I will be disappointed, so I love when the ending leaves me with a smile and satisfaction.
A couple of notes: 1.) The term "classic rock" was not used until the 1980s, and included 70s music, so if the story happens in the 70s, then it would have been and "oldies station. 2.) Not sure where this takes place, but if it is the USA, then stalking was not illegal in any state of the union, until California passed the first law, making it so, in 1990.
This is a nice bit of flash fiction. It sets the stage and tells a story with a nice twist ending very well. It does beg to grow into a bigger story, perhaps a short story, or even a part of a larger novel, with more detail and in depth exploration of emotion.
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