That piece of writing brought me to tears. That was a beautiful analogy. You know, I made a similar philosiphy with art.
"When you dance, you stumble. When you play, you hit a wrong note. When you draw, that line may stray. But you'll soon find that song we can all listen to. That dance we can dance along to. And that picture we all can admire together."
That was a masterpiece right there and I can easily see that as a pep talk or a speech.
That was very interesting. The flashback was a little confusing. And I'm not sure what exactly happened after she fell. I would guess something traumatic. The pauses, I think, aren't necessary. Do you want to extend this into a complete work? I guess there wouldn't that much emotion if doesn't have any. I had a great time reading this. Keep up the good work.
It was very suspenseful. If only I knew what she was. This would be an awesome novel. You should really continue it. I'm sure the key can have a certain signifigance in the story.
That was a cute story. I really enjoyed the urgency turning into humor. This story really warmed my heart. And it really was one last battle. The fire chief v.s. the birthday cake. I know this is emotional for the chief, but some more emotion descriptions wouldn't hurt. Very nice story.
That was a very cute poem. I thought it was so sweet, in a sort of way. It was very clever of you to change R.E.M. to R.A.M. That was very cool. You're complaining in an entertaining and fun kind of way. You still love him. Just not the feet in face, or blanket hogging, or the thrashing around. I really liked it. Nice job.
That is a comical story there. And I found that I know Conan quite well ;)....but I still don't get the purpose of that whole idea. That "psychic" had what was coming for her, though. Good story.
It was a very interesting plot. I'm assuming that the whole ordeal was a flashback, right? Also, the weather was a little confusing in the 32nd paragraph. But overall the plot was very cool. This is something that I will look into because that was very entertaining. This is actually my first time reading a western story. Keep up the good work.
That. Was. So. Amazing. Not only was the story inspirational, just the format of it was amazing. It was sad at the beginning....I can relate to shutting the world out. Then, at the end...it was so heartwarming. That gave me something to hang on to. You opened up. Even after what happened. What a story.
That was divine and realistic at the same time. It's like you're describing that one part in a young relationship that people tend to lose sight of. Very nice.
That is deep. I have to say, I can relate to that. I have my oen interpretation of this poem....but everyone does. I love a poem with multiple meanings. It could mean one thing, or another. But tweak you can make is that in the third stanza, the last line is a bit out of rhythm. That's it, though. The content within the poem and its intentions are very well mixed. I loved it.
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