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Review by BlueThunder Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Mario,
This is a very well written and told story. It was definatly different and went from dreams to escape, to see things or be a great person in history, to talking to a spirit. You didn't mention if this spirit was someone the person dreaming would have known, or if the spirit just chose the dreamer to speak to for what ever reason. Maybe work with that part, reread it and add in a little more reason or imagination that would make this perticular spirit just suddenly invade this persons mind.

I found it also amazing as to how the dreamer went from talking to a spirit to picturing world destruction by listening to a conversation at the church. I felt that something was missing between the two different realms here. Other than that, I found no grammar or spelling mistakes. The story read well and was very interesting. I really enjoyed reading it. It needs a little more polishing up, but other than that, Its definatly a great imaginatory work of writing. Thank you so much for sharing *Smile*

Blessings Always,
BlueThunder
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hiya Bill *Laugh*

OMG, this is one of the funniest things I have read in a loooooong time!!! I can't believe you wrote this LOL, but I'm glad that you did. I'm actually laughing so hard, I have tears here. This is some fantastic dialogue and lol, you captured the whole personality complex going on here between Michael and the lawyer just as I would expect it to happen!! I expect alot of things to happen, but the part about the monkey lololol, considering he has so many animals anyway, was the ultimate imagination at work here. Out of all the animals this guy has, it would be the monkeys fault LOL. Then the lawyer actually thinking it a bright idea lolol. Bill!! *Laugh**Laugh**Laugh* this is just toooooo funny.

It usually takes alot to get me into a laughing fit like this. I'd have to say, "Mission accomplished" and this is absolutly perfect! *Laugh* You know I will be thinking about this the rest of the day now. LOL, and everytime I watch CNN and any coverage on Michael's trial, Im going to be thinking about this monkey now Bill, LOL *Laugh**Laugh*

I couldn't find any grammar or spelling errors in this comedy piece. Probably because I was laughing so hard while reading it, between laughing *Laugh* and the tears flowing, I wouldn't have noticed them if they were there anyway LOLOL.

You have an excellent talent for writing in dialogue, and to pick these two charactors out to write a dialogue/story item from is just hilarious. I used to be a pretty big fan of Michaels when I was younger, and thought he was a great dancer and entertainer. His Thriller album was one of my favorites until he started turning into a kook. Thanks so much for sharing this, I had a great time reading it (even though it took me over a half an hour to r//r/r this, from laughing so hard, it was worth it) Keep writing!! it is a great treat to read your items *Smile* (((((Hugs))))) and a big thank you *Bigsmile* I hope other people take the time to read this also, its great!! I loved it *Laugh**Heart*

Blessings Always,
BlueThunder *Bigsmile**Heart*
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Review of A Box of You  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Vampirerose *Smile*

Wow, what a great story!! This one really held my attention and I couldn't stop reading it. I think you did a fantastic job in writing this and created a haunting scene between Paige and Megan. The dialogue and descriptions were good, and you told this story with the intention of keeping the reader in much anticipation. You made this story very realistic and lifelike, connecting the reader to the charactors. This was an awesome read. You managed to keep me sitting on the edge of my chair while reading through this one. Well done!!!

I found no spelling or grammar errors standing out to stop or break the readers pace, while reading this story. This is scary, creepy, and an overall great horror story. I can only imagine the same fate happened to Megan, as did to Paige. The final line of the story left the reader to wonder, but also kept the saying of 'What goes around, Comes around' no matter how long it takes lol. Thank you so much for the great read. I really enjoyed this and will check out more of your port.

Also, I noticed you were new to this site. A very warm welcome to Writing.Com. You will love it here and the people are great!! You are off to a wonderful start here at this site. I can't wait to read more *Bigsmile* ((Hugs)) Keep writing, your good at it *Smile*

Blessings Always,
BlueThunder *Smile*

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Review of Beavers Creek  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Mock *Smile*
This is quite a story you have going here. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop. I just had to keep going to see where this was going. You have a wonderful development of charactors going here and very interesting ones at that. Are you going to continue this story? I would love to find out what happened to Jim Foley and just what is lurking in the dark. My first thought, after the description of the of the blue skinned, lipped, and black tongued child with rows of sharp black teeth, speaking voices of the dead. (Great charactor description here) Definatly full of horror and suspense. You also gave a great description of Beaver Creek. Lots of great imagry and I could easily visualize Jims surroundings as he played there.

I also thought that you gave great imagry in your description of the hicksville town. If I were a tourist, I could see everything as you told it to be. You described the local residents of the town great, and gave their background storys very well. It was as if one knew these people forever.

I noticed a few errors within the story, although they might have been written that way intentionally. If so, disregard my suggestions. I think that at these certain points of the story, if corrected either by my suggestions or someone elses, the story might read a little smoother. I will show you the ones that I found. You may want to keep them the same or change them to an even better sentance. This story is well developed and I hope there is more added to this.

The errors that I ran across were:

You wrote:

Jim was stumbled up towards the light, towards the clearing.

I would have written:

Jim (had) stumbled up towards the light, towards the clearing.

You wrote the word:

whorling.........I think it is spelled *Whirling*

You wrote:

If they were lucky they would get a couple of beavers may be, standing on their hind legs

I would have written may be as one word- maybe (although depending on how its used, your spelling may be right)

You wrote in this sentance:

hand built and crafted by Old Toby who had died at the ripe old age of 87 in 1968 of good old Angie P. Ralis .

You might want to let the readers know what 'Good old Angie P. Ralis' meant (for those of us who have no clue lol)

You wrote in this sentance:

and colorful baits for your fishing - in fact if you needed something you didn’t know where on the earth you’d find you’d probably find it at Abbot’s.

It might work better if you had said, 'and colorful baits for (all your fishing needs)- in fact if you needed something (and didn't know where on earth to find it)(,) you'd probably find it at Abbots.

In this line you wrote:

If he met up with the former Mrs. Kate George Beasley he would learn her and she wouldn’t think of reporting her would she and if she tried well he would take his belt to the bitch .

It might work better written as:

If he met up with the former Mrs. Kate George Beasley he would teach her. She wouldn't even think of reporting (him)(.) (S)hould she try, well he would just take his belt to the bitch.

In part of this sentance you wrote:

Frank, had been copped on a drug charge in New York and his sister Geraldine danced at topless at the Paradise Alley club in L.A.

Get rid of the extra *AT* in the part:

His sister Geraldine danced topless at the Paradise Alley Club in L.A.

In this sentance you wrote:

Brad watched reruns of M*A*S*H* on cable TV, his feet on the couch a six pack, a pack of potato chips and an pack of Marlboro lights to keep him company.

I would add in a comma by, 'His feet on the couch(,) a six pack, a (bag)of potato chips(,) and (a) pack of Marlboro lights to keep him company.

Just a few suggestions to get the story to read through with no stops or breaks. The reader wouldn't have to incorporate their own words or interperitations into the story.

Your imagry is great, your charactors are described well and the overall story is very creepy and scary. Add more to it, please lol. As it is now, the way it ended here leaves the reader in sort of a confused state. Whats going to happen next? What is the monster type thing lurking in the pine trees? What happened to Jim Foley? Will he be found? Does the wolf caught in the trap give a hint that there may be werewolves responsible for the unexplained disappearances? There are alot of open spots within the story. Instead of elaborating on the weather conditions so deeply, (which I know part is necessary to describe what happened to the kids who drown/froze when the ice cracked when ice skating) go more into detail at whats actually out there under the full moonlight. Or, do they only come out when the moon is full? or do these creatures come out anytime during the night?

The story has a good base and beginning, great charactor descriptions and description of the town, but I want to know lolol, whats out there and if its going to strike again? If its ever stopped and how? If not, who else does it get and do they turn into the same sort of creature after draining all the blood out of their victums? Without elaborating, or going into more detail in these areas, you will loose the attention of the reader after being drawn into the story so good in the beginning. This is good, but needs some polishing and additions/subtractions to the story as it is now.

I love horror and read alot of it, dont throw this story away, give it more of what it needs. You are doing great with it and keep writing. You are on a good story line, and dont hesitate to get a little crazier with it.If you do add to it, please let me know. I'd love to continue reading this *Bigsmile* I hope my suggestions have helped you out in some way. If not, feel free to ignore them lol. This story is going well and is on the right track, and you can do many things with it. Keep up the good work and I'll check back *Bigsmile* ((Hugs)) Thanks for sharing!

Blessings Always,
BlueThunder *Smile*

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Review by BlueThunder Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello Emily *Smile*

This is a very good story. I always love a good horror with charactors that are a bit 'off the wall' so to say. LOL. I think you captured this charactor extremely well. You gave her great personality. I think crazy people have some of the most unusual, and best personalitys, and never boring or dull. (Although, lol they do tend to make us wonder most of the time what really is going on with them, thats what makes this woman her own unique person)

You created great imagry in describing her evil deeds, and to her, she was the normal one! As I read this, I could vision well what she had done to the boyfriend and to herself. Giving her the rocking motion and rapid thought and speach qualitys gave the reader a great visual as to actually watching this going on. I enjoyed reading this story very much.

I rated this a 4.5 because I felt that not only was it excellently written, but it needed some polishing work done. I will point out a couple of those areas to you because they caused me some confusion as to if she were speaking these sentances outloud, or thinking them to herself. I also wasnt sure where she was when she nailed herself into the room when the mirror broke. As I read, I pictured her in a room with the Dr. and was in the process of going through the motions and explanations to him. You also had mentioned that she was in a room with barred windows. This led me to kind of get lost at the end when she spoke of nailing herself in, and breaking the mirror. I felt some remorse that she was going through when this happened though because the woman in the mirror, she claimed was her best friend at times, and her only friend. By breaking the mirror when the last nail was driven in, in her mind, she had just lost her friend, but felt set free.

You might want to polish that part up some and let it be known if she was still in the same room with the Dr, only with a mirror in the room too? or maybe a two way mirror put up so the Dr could observe and get what answers he needed while he analyzed or interrigated her? This was a confusing area for me to read, but prehaps not for someone else to read. I suppose it would depend on how each reader interpreted this action and thought process/explanation.

Also, I found a few parts that started out as a quote, as she was speaking outloud about the things she had done, and actions she had taken to end her up into a mental ward.

Some examples are:

You wrote:

Now, I know what you must be thinking, “This chick is insane, a real monster”, but I assure you I’m not. I’m very sweet. I’m the nicest, most caring person you will ever meet. And if you’re nice and kind to me, we’ll never have any problems, but that bitch in the mirror tortures me so. Every single day, calling me names. Telling me I don’t deserve to live and I need to die for the lives I’ve taken. But I’ve never taken a life that in someway didn’t deserved to be taken. Should I really be prosecuted for bringing justice to the world?”

You started out this paragraph with:

Now, I know what you must be thinking,

Then go into a quote. Would this sentance beginning be also quoted? or a thought? Then what appears to be a long quote of her speaking starts out with the next line:

“This chick is insane, a real monster”, but I assure you I’m not. I’m very sweet. I’m the nicest, most caring person you will ever meet. And if you’re nice and kind to me, we’ll never have any problems, but that bitch in the mirror tortures me so. Every single day, calling me names. Telling me I don’t deserve to live and I need to die for the lives I’ve taken. But I’ve never taken a life that in someway didn’t deserved to be taken. Should I really be prosecuted for bringing justice to the world?”

You ended the quote in the next sentance, then ended the paragraph in a quote also. You might want to end it there, with that sentance. Then start a new sentance to finish the quote (Unless she is now thinking the rest of the paragraph, but no other beginning of a quote is mentioned. If it is meant to be a complete quote, I would have written:

“This chick is insane, a real monster,(keep the quote going) but I assure you I’m not. I’m very sweet. I’m the nicest, most caring person you will ever meet. And if you’re nice and kind to me, we’ll never have any problems, but that bitch in the mirror tortures me so. Every single day, calling me names. Telling me I don’t deserve to live and I need to die for the lives I’ve taken. But I’ve never taken a life that in someway didn’t (deserve, change it to diserve possibly) to be taken. Should I really be prosecuted for bringing justice to the world?”

You wrote:

Done is done as done is done and I did what I did because…and that’s it. I promise I won’t do it anymore. She laughed at me again. I couldn’t take it anymore. I slammed the door and nailed it shut. As I drove in the last nail, with the last hit I heard the mirror fall to the floor and break.”

If she is quoting/speaking this all to the Dr. add quotation marks in the very beginning of the sentance.

Where was she when she nailed herself in behind the door? At the Dr's or at home? somewhere else?

The very last sentance is perfect:

Her head slumps down to her chest, but she looks straight into the doctor’s eyes for the first time. “Finally, I’m free.” She wickedly smiles.

Everything seems to be written correct here between the action and the speach.

This is just a few suggestions, and you might want to read the story over and take a little less confusion out of certain areas.

The story overall is a perfectly written story with fantastic content, charactor description, and great imagry into the mind of someone who is definatly mentally ill. You gave a perfect ideal as to her frame of thought by thinking she wasnt crazy at all!!! Bravo for writing a great story *Smile* Just reread the story and maybe outloud so that you can get a good idea of confusion, and difference of dialogue and thoughts change off.

Other than that, the content was perfect, I could follow the story well and really thought you did a great job of writing it *Smile* Keep writing, this is a great story and I loved reading it. These were just a few suggestions which can be polished up some if you want to do it. Write on!!! and I will check back to your port to read more storys. It would be well worth the read! *Smile* You are great at charactor development, horror, and imagry. Great writing talent!! (((Hugs)))

I hope this review helps you out some *Smile*

Blessings Always,
BlueThunder *Heart*

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Review of The Watercourse  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Bill,

Wow!!! I have to say that this is one of the best stories that I have read in quite awhile. I can see why it got an awardicon too. *Smile*

From the beginning to end, this held my attention to no end. Actually, I was hoping that it wouldn't have ended lol. I thought the way you both told, and wrote the story was fantastic! You move the reader from one time frame to the next with no hesitation and an even flow. I felt like I knew the charactors in the story in real life.

You captured several genres here, and tied them all into one great read. I loved the horror, thriller, and action that the mother took when she floored the car into the river. You took this story to both ends of the spectrum so to speak. From the chilling violence between the mother and the father, to the drowning of the children, but yet, added in in equal parts the love and devotion the mother still had for her children. Although the mother was portrayed as this hideous creature who the children did not recognize until Penny noticed the locket and remembered who she was toward the end, both still found love for her.

Your description of the charred, burned, dead dog floating down the river drew me in immediatly. I had to know just what was going to happen next and where it came from and what was caused this to happen. I especially loved your description of the burned bodies that floated by after the dog. The sentance:

Their heads bobbed up and down in the water like a crowd of human corks; each moving like a hideous jack-in-the-box that would suddenly pop up from the black water revealing a grisly face tortured and burnt by fire.

Describing heads bobbing up and down like human corks, was great. That is a good use of imagery there. I could see exactly what you were writing here *Smile* It is very vivid and now the image of that is set into my mind lol, forever. Your use of many descriptive terms in this story paints a picture of the scene in the readers mind extremely well.

At first, when they discovered and encountered the old woman, and the description that you gave this charactor popped a picture of my 102 year old grandmother into my mind immediatly lolol. (The woman was petrified and still smoked 3 packs of cigarettes a day and drank her hootch, claiming thats what kept her alive?? I wonder LOL) From then on, the mother charactor then took on the features of someone I could relate to in real life.

Going back to the beginning, where she gets slapped and decides to shoot the father, sort of rocked me on my heels. The way the story started, I never expected that to happen, so the element of surprise was very well portrayed in that sequence. In other words, I was glued to this story from then on till the end. (I didnt want it to end either, I wanted to find out what happened after the kids were on the other side of the river then lol)

I found only one or two parts that I had to reread, and maybe they were meant to be written that way. I will show you what they were:

We watched the dead man floated by.

I would have thought it to read...

We watched the dead man float by.

or...

We watched as the dead man floated by.

Not a major distraction for me, maybe an oversight? or something, or I just didn't read it correctly when I read it lol.

The other sentance was...

“Dammit Russ,” Mamma yelled. “Just once, I liked to see all of us go to church together!”

If I had written it, I would have said:

"Dammit Russ," Mamma yelled. "Just once i'd like to see all of us go to church together...... or

"Just once I would like to see all of us go to church together.

But you know, thats just me. Alot of times I change dialogue to match the dialect or area a story takes place in and the people who live there. There are all sorts of different accents and dialects that you just have to change to make the story more realistic. I'm no grammar or linguist major lolol. But, sometimes grammar and pronounciation rules just have to be broken to portray the charactor more to life. Not everyone speaks proper english and different locations and the education of the person has to change to fit the story line. So no way would I deduct anything against rating the dialogue here. The content of the story overrides that totally. There are too many excellent descriptions and believable dialogue in this story to rate it anything less than perfect.

I also noticed no spelling errors, and the grammar fits the story and plot perfectly.

I was very excited when reading this because once I got into it, which was just about immediatly lol, there was absolutly no way I was putting it on hold to read later. I had to read it.

I loved the charactors, the story line, plot and ending. This story was a fantastic read and when I find one of these out there, I like to sit back, take my time and read through it with no interruptions. Which is why I normally do most of my reading at night when its quiet and nobody bothers me lol.

I would love to suggest this story to anyone who loves anything in the horror, thriller, scary, action, adventure and a bit of inspirational genres. Also to anyone who loves great dialogue and mysterious reading. I'm going to send this one into the public reviews page, which I don't do very often. I'm sure anyone who loves a good horror packed story would not want to miss this one. This is my honest opinion, and I would read it again. This could also be a great beginning to a novella or novel also. That I would enjoy reading and see where the kids go from here on.

Thank you for sharing this story. I truly enjoyed every second of the eerie excitement. I think you are a fantastic writer who can not only describe whats going on and the charactors, but also tell it excellently capturing the readers every moment of anticipation.

An Excellent Read!!

Blessings Always,
BlueThunder

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Review of Destination Home  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Bakergirl,

I had to pause and reflect awhile after reading your story 'Destination Home.' I happened to notice it on the top of the scrolling IM's. After reading the description of the story, I thought 'Oh,this sounds good,' and didn't hesitate to click on it. I cant even begin to tell you how wonderful, and also sad story this was.

I read it twice. The first time with broad expectations and great interest. The second time reading it, brought the tears. After sitting here and crying for twenty minutes, and looking at the page, I finally was able to write this review.

I found your story excellently told, and written. Many memories of my own flashed through my mind while reading this. I thought that the story described everything in a very orderly fashion. It held my attention from the beginning to the end, twice. The way you described the whole trip home, was well organized and pleasant to follow and read. You not only covered each and every detail of the trip back home well, you also covered some of the more finer details of rez life. From the delapidated houses, to the wonder of scenery, the beauty of the people, the feeling one gets watching a hawk circling above, to the colorful regalia, and the never ending dancing and story telling. I felt myself seeing each and everything you described. It was like I was on this same trip, seeing everything as you told it.

I could smell the sweet grass and sage, the shell, and the elders in my mind and heart. I could see the wildlife and especially loved the bear story told at story time.

I did not, now will I comment on gramatical or punctuation because you told this so vividly and realistic. I feel that overrides any mistakes there may be in the story. Sometimes there is a time when you have to look at what is being said and told, and not follow all the rules that are expected of us on a daily basis. Content takes precidence when the imagery of a story is so profound.

I also will not comment on any gramatical/punctuation errors within the story that you told about the bear cub, and its mother. Why? because you told it as it is. It was real, and someone shared it, and told it. The wording is exactly the way I would have heard a similar story on a rez. LOL and I have heard plenty in my lifetime. The stick game was told exactly as it is played and the description of the encampment, the tipi's, and the old pendelton blankets and quilts brought back memories of my own. The blessings were told as they should be told and never to be altered in anyway. I loved every second that I spent reading your story, even the time spent shedding a few tears afterwords.

Nicely done, and though we tend to live in two different worlds, never forget the images painted in our minds over the years. Both good and bad. Aho

Mitakuye Oyasin,
BlueThunder

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Review of Marred Vision  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Knee,
This has got to be one of the funniest poems I have ever read. Great imagination and humor here. I think everyone should read this to get a good chuckle. Its nice to read something so different and funny for a change. I am going to send this over to the review page and you should plug it for others to take a look at and keep. When your down, reading a poem like this would put a smile on anyones face.

I saw no spelling errors, and the poem read easily.

Wonderful, funny, and delightful to read. *Smile*


Blessings Always,
Blue Thunder
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Review of SURE  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Writing Butterfly,

I found thiis poem to be very interesting. Sometimes I can't imagine just how many times these same words crossed my mind too. This poem was very well written and held my attention completely. Great job, maybe a little brushing up on it here and there, but the poem itself was on the right track for sure. Congratulations on getting a good point across!!

The poem also read well, abd was smooth reading. Well done. The best part that I liked was the line,,,, Wow I never heard that zip code before. I got a chuckle out of that one. Also the last line, I'll never lie to you, not you lol. Oh boy that was a classic!! I wish I could count the times I heard that one. You touched the very essence of dating and someone proclaiming their love and desire of being with you and coming up with the very excuse of not wanting to be with you. Nice job, keep writing!!
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Review of Family Reunion  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Viv,

What a great recollection and description of what was a fantastic trip. I only wish that I could have made it there. After almost killing myself for a year to pay for it all, it was the most exciting thing in my life to make it there. I got half way then almost killed myself getting home lol. I talked to a guy who lives twelve miles from where the convention took place and he told me that centeral Penna is not the place to get off the toll road (I-80) and what I described to him, and all that happened was absolutly true. He told me that those mountain people are a wild bunch and if they see an out of state licence plate, thats fair game for them. I told him, why didn't you warn me in the first place? He said I told you to fly lol, and taking a short cut through that area isnt a very good idea and he never goes in that direction anymore. Its a good thing that I didn't drive by my self, but if I had, I would have stayed on the tollway all the way across. That will teach me not to listen to Joe and his bright ideas of taking shortcuts on a two lane winding road through the applachian and allegheny mountains again. Everyone had a convention for three to four days, I had one of my own conventions going on for a whole week. I should write about my w.com convention lolol. It would be a book and a half. Luckily, we were not that far south of State College Penna to find an ER, and at first I thought I had only sprained my ankle. That was until I decided to stand up on it. I wasn't going very far, too fast at that point. So we ended up camping out in the woods until the pain of the fractured foot was bearable enough for me to make it home. By that time it was already too late to get to the real convention. Now thats what I call a road trip LOL. You told your story of your convention experience excellently. Thanks for sharing, I wish I could have been there.


*hugs n kisses*

Michele/BlueThunder
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Review of Walls of Panic  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Viv,
Wow, this poem sums it all up perfectly. The rhyming was good, your choice of words really brought out the emotion and feeling in this poem. I had to rate this a perfect five because prehaps what I am dealing with right now made me see a little more deeper into this poem than someone else might not. This poem not only is strong in description, feeling, emotion and reality of life, it also touches home. It opened my eyes, and shut them after reading it. There were no breaks, it read smooth and kept a good rhythem while keeping me, the reader, move through it with perfect clarity. Very well done Viv, hugs.

Blessings Always,
Blue Thunder
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Review of your eyes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,
A very deep and moving poem. I truly enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing such intense writing. I hope to read more of your poems and other writings in the future. I will be back to check out your port again to see whats new. I noticed that you are new, so would like to extend a very warm welcome to Writing.com. I am sure that you will love it here and find that it is a great place to share your muse. Everyone at this site are fantastic people. You have a very smooth talent for writing poetry and there are many poetry lovers out there that I am sure will just love reading your writing. Thanks again for sharing, I enjoyed your poem very much. *Bigsmile*

Blessings Always,
BlueThunder
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Again *Smile*

This too I found absolutly hilarious. Just the thought of being abducted by Michael Jackson on a space ship with a cow was too much lol. Having a monkey as a therapist for four years is crazy, and funny. I sure hope you get bored more often lolol because I can't wait to see what you will come up with next!! *Smile* I think you are a great writer in the comedy genre. Fantastic job, and Im still laughing *Bigsmile* Thanks again for the great laugh tonight !! Keep up the good work, as Im turning into a regular fan real quick here. LOLOL.

Blessings Always,
BlueThunder

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there,
Congratulations, this has been one of the funniest pieces I have ever read here at w.com. Don't ask me why, during my wanderings through random ports, I stumbled onto this story, but I did. The title didn't say much, but it looked like it might be interesting none the less. As I read along, I was cracking up with laughter so hard that even my dogs looked at me funny. Its a good thing it isn't summer and I had my windows open or my neighbors would have thought I had finally lost it for sure. The part about the alien from france, lol, eating the fish and then salting the mongoose was hilarious. Then the Taco bell escapade was just hysterical. (BTW, they never get my orders right either lolol, so I could relate to that one) I feel that one must posess great talent to write something in the comedy/humor genre. Even when I watch a movie that is rated as a comedy, I rarly find it funny. In other words it takes a lot, and the person has to be really good to get me to bust out laughing in fits like that. You have succeeded in this extremely well. Has anyone ever told you that you might make a great stand up comedian? If not, I will, and might I suggest you give it a try? You never know, you just might be the next Jim Carey or John Candy out there, among others who have made it big. This whole piece was hilarious from beginning to end. When I read the title, 'The Last Days' I had assumed I was opening up a more serious type of story. What a surprise I got LOL. I am definatly going to be reading the rest of your port now. You not only have great writing skills, but also a great talent for writing in the comedy/humor genre. I was not in the best of moods when I opened up your port, but now, after laughing so hard reading this, i'm in a great mood LOL, Thanks for the great laugh. This is excellent. A write extremely well done and told. Thank you for sharing *Bigsmile*

Blessings Always,
BlueThunder

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