For a dialog story it was VERY good! it buit suspence really well. I did notice the lack of sensoy details, for instance repeatedly in this story a storm is meationed coming in quickly, in life this comes with wind. This tye of data will pull the reader in more. Don't get me wrong you have an outstadanding story as it is written, this would be icing on the cake.
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