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Review by wolf knight
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is the second Review in your Friendship/just because Elven Tea Garden Party Gifted to you by:{username:callumw}

I love this story, the visual was amazing. I wish this was a chapter book I want to know what happens after the short story stops.

Keep writing

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Review of Behind sad eyes  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is the first Review in your Friendship/just because Elven Tea Garden Party Gifted to you by: {username:callumw}

I love this story. It feels like a prologue to me I wish it was one but oh well.
There was on part that didn't make senses. And she was wont The wont was a bit confusing.

Keep writing.

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Review of A Special Mom.  
Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is the third and final Review in your Just Because Elven Tea Garden Party Gifted to you by: Anon

I really liked this. I was suprised by you using her name. I expected it to be an accrostic using MOTHER or MOM. <smiles> Your poem makes your mom sound like a really great lady. I hope you showed this to her. :) It is a poem worthy of any mother.

We hope you enjoyed your Tea Party and Keep Writing!

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Review by wolf knight
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is the second Review in your Just Because Elven Tea Garden Party Gifted to you by:annon

This is a great prolougg.It was almost perfect, the only thing i would change is to break the first paragragh in two once you got to: Jared looked at the burning city of Zatire from the safety of a mountain. He stood frozen with desperate fear and sadness as he thought about all the people who died such a painfully tormenting deaths of burning and suffocation from smoke. He smelled traces of the inferno carried by the wind.

But other then that perfect.

Keep writing!

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Review by wolf knight
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is the First Review in your Just Because Elven Tea Garden Party Gifted to you by: Anon

I really like this story. You did a good job picking out the names of your characters. Your sense of humor really shined through with this. However, the first paragragh was a little long. You might want to make it smaller some how or break it up into more than one paragraph. It also need some proof reading. There where a few typos, mainly where you turned words around. Reading it out loud to yourself will help catch those. But over all I really did love this story I can't wait to read more of your work!

Keep writing!


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