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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
So, I came across this as a "Random Review", and I have to say, I'm glad I did. Firstly, I'm a big fan of prose, and in terms of writing in the genre, I think you've nailed it. It's a stream of consciousness that delivers a message and does so without rambling. Mechanically speaking, I think you've done a great job with word selection and punctuation placement. I think that your line "Such a splendid word that I thought was correctly in my vocabulary" is the only one I found that might stand to gain from a little work. It almost feels like there's a word missing; maybe something like "...I thought was so correctly defined in my vocabulary", it that makes any sense at all.

As far as the actual content of the work (the most important part), this is so fantastically heartbreaking, and honest. I love how you challenge the notion of being genuine, and how you use the metaphorical representation of masks to explore the idea of changing how we present ourselves, often when we need to allow ourselves to be most vulnerable and honest (when the "help" arrives). I also admire how your narrator presents the initial question, "what does it mean to be genuine?", and ultimately arrives at a resolution; "To be authentic. I'm not that." I thought this was such an honest, elegant answer to the narrator's own initial thoughts, and I love how it shakes the audience's idea of their own authenticity. Anyway, my apologies for rambling, and hopefully you've found my review at least somewhat helpful. Don't be surprised if you see more, I'll be checking out your portfolio indefinitely.
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