Nicely written--is it a part of some thing larger?
I think the first part was the strongest--good evocative description of a character in the pothead friend. Ditto the descriptioon of Chalmers. I think there's a Chalmers on every college campus. Mine was named Cargill.
I think you should have (no pun intended) fleshed out the female characters more. Every girl/woman I've had sex with had something that made them unique (all cats are NOT grey in the dark, IOW) something that makes sex with them good in a unique way or bad in a unique way. IMO, that's where this piece needs work.
Still it was agood read, and IMO you are a good writer.
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