This poem is very casual and care- free . I like how it captures the excitement of childhood and the innocence that comes with it. In my opinion the poem is well paced. sometimes you get people writing a chunk of stuff and it's hard to read because it's all squashing together. No grammatical errors which is good.
I find your poem to be very interesting and informative. I didn't realise so much of our societies can be so unequal. I guess I live in a part of the world where I luckily don't have to see this too much. Your poem is well paced and has good rhythm
thanks for writing this, I've learned something new today
I like your poem. Its powerful and descriptive. This might just be me, but sometimes I found it hard to understand all the words and this distracted me from the poem a little bit. These included words like 'cleave' and 'glyphs'. Again that could just be me but just thought I'd mention it. No grammatical errors as far as I can see. so yay!
I'm doing some reviewing and your piece came up on my feed. I like your poem, I used to live in a big city so I can relate to a lot of the things you talk about here. Your poem is simple and easy to read and I don't see any spelling errors or grammatical errors. It has good flow and really makes me miss the city!
I was just doing a spot of reviewing and I came across your work. It's very short but also easy to understand. No spelling mistakes as far as I can see. I am intrigued and wondering why Sue's funeral is tomorrow if she won the lottery?
I'm just doing a spot of reviewing during my bank holiday monday ( no work woo! ) and I came across your work. Just going to give you some feedback if that's okay. I always love hearing about camps, I myself have attended a few before and it's always very good. Reading your piece broughg back memories of when I was in Germany a few years ago. I think your piece is interesting and informative, and easy to read.
I'm doing the rounds this evening and I came across your work. I'd love to find out more! Is it a sequel? I've never heard of Chantal Kreviazuk but I'll google him now in a second. I would love to read more of your work
I'm doing some reviewing over the holidays and stumbled upon your piece. I'd love to read more about this, it has good descriptions and is well paced :) No spelling mistakes as far as I can see, it's easy to imagine the man covered in black. The only thing I would say is that it's very short, but maybe this is part of a sequel or something similar.
I was doing a spot of reviewing and came across your poem. Just thought I'd leave some feedback. Your work makes an impact on me, I genuinely panicked with the child when the water went over their head. It is simple and easy to understand. I also l think the use of colours is done very well.
Just doing a spot of reviewing and thought I'd leave some feedback. Your story is very simple and easy to understand. It has the classic 'moral' or 'lesson' that a reader can learn from it. I would have thought Lucy was the central character instead of Frank but just my opinion.
I took some time to read through your work and thought I'd leave some feedback. Your piece is interesting, from what I gather it's a true real life story? Or based off one? Either way I find the characters engaging and it's easy to read. I noted some spelling mistakes like ' wither ' , but these are easily corrected.
I was doing a spot of reviewing and I came across your poem. I like your poem, it's simple but striking. It's easy to imagine the moth flying along trying in vain to fly higher. I'd be interested in reading more of your work :)
I was doing some reviewing and came across your poem. Just thought I'd give you some feedback :) Okay so I like your poem, it's simple and easy to understand yet still imaginative and very descriptive. As far as I can see there are no spelling or grammatical errors so yay!
I was reviewing and came across your piece. Just thought I'd leave some feedback. Overall I really like your poem, it's simple, easy to understand and descriptive. I counted the syllables and there were 17! I'd love to see more of your work, I don't usually read Haikuettes but this one is an eye-opener.
I was reviewing and came across your piece. Just thought i'd leave some feedback - I like your poem, it's very descriptive and thought provoking - although I'm still not sure what emotion you're hinting at?! Either way there's a lot of suspense in this poem when I read it and i really like it
I came across your piece while I was reviewing and thought i'd leave some feedback .I like your poem, you can definitely tell that the writer enjoys creative writing. I think comparing it to different people like 'runners' and 'dancers' is a good way to explain things. It also makes it easy for a person to imagine and understand.
Take care x hope that competition went well and if not it's good experience!
I came across your short story while reviewing and thought I'd give some feedback. I like your style of writing, its accessible and easily understood. I felt a bit sad for the main character that she is not happy with the way things are. I admire her husbands efforts to 'make things right' and I love the descriptions of Cenia's 'unruly frizzy mop'.
I read your poem and thought I'd give some feedback - I like your poem. It's very lyrical and has good rhythm. I feel like the repetition of that one line gives it more emphasis and personality. I get a very nostalgic feel when i read this poem. And it's not sad, even though it's hinted that the grandfather isn't around anymore. I like it!
I was reading your poem and thought I'd give some feedback. I like the layout of your poem, it's very creative. It made me a bit sad that the cat died but maybe he is still alive because he winked?!. Anyways I enjoyed reading your poem, I see no spelling mistakes that are present.
Just thought I'd give you some feedback on your work. I'm actually Irish so I was really excited to read your poem! I think it captures the the atmosphere and excitement of a parade very well. I did notice some spelling mistakes - such as the title 'St Patrics' and 'Right t (at?) the irish club door. It didn't really affect the writing too much but just thought I'd let you know :)
I was looking through the website and I came across your poem. Just thought I'd leave some feedback! I think your poem is really nice, it's simple and easy to understand. I don't see any spelling errors in the poem so that's all good.
I came across your poem and thought I'd read it and give some feedback :) . I like your poem, it's very descriptive and has good rhythm. Something I struggle with a lot when writing poetry is having good flow , but you have it !
I read your poem and decided to leave some feedback. I like how your poem is different from the modern 'rhyming' ones. This one has a lot of imagery and it's easy to imagine the setting and surroundings. I don't think there are any spelling mistakes in it, it reads very smoothly.
I just dropped by and happened to read your poem! I like how your poem is simple yet touching, it touches on an issue we are all faced with - ageing. No one (unfortunately!) is immune to getting old, and this is something the main character realises. I hope you write more poems like this - they are very memorable :)
Just thought I'd leave some feedback after reading your poem. Like your last poem I also think this one has very good imagery. I like how you use nature in your poems, it's easy to read and I can easily imagine a little girl pointing up at the sky, asking her mother to 'come look too'
take care x
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