I would first like to say tha this piece exceptionally written and quite realistic in the way you spoke to your audience. I can comprehend that this is an "off the top of my head type of document and I do not intend to insult or take away from the fact that it was quite interesting. I can see that you are well grounded in your belief so I also do not wish to change what you believe, instead to merely give constuctive critisicism.
First, I would like to state that it seems that you have little information on the theorys of evolution as well as on the big bang. I am assuming that you have devoted your time more so to the literature and learning of what you believe in, but we all know what assuming does. There is nothing wrong with building upon your own beliefs, but i feel it is somewhat foolish to make statements upon something you have not formally immersed yourself in. A little knowledge is by far worse than no knowledge. To truly have well founded strength in your belief you should be able to listen to others points of view and remain somewhat open-minded, all the while NOT closing out the possibility that you may not have all the answers. Another thing I would like to touch upon is your statement that you are not worthy of his grace and yet you devote your life to something you KNOW you will never measure up to. Just a thought, wouldnt't that instill a low sense of self-worth springing from he who (in your point of view) has given you the breath in your lungs and the life you live?
Also I would like to inquire as to your statement on the veiw of god through man's eyes being unfounded; but I pray you answer was not the foundry of almost every religion not writ down by the very creature you stated can never know his mighty, omniprescent knowledge. It seems contradictory to say the least. If this is true then I must ask, referring to a previous section, why the statements on religion conceived by man are more truthful than the science put forth by man?
Overall it was terrificly written and very easy reading. Your sentence structure was quite impressive and the context really drew me in. By the way, i'm not sure how she feel after reading this! But my grandmother is ruwth. Thank you for your piece and implore you to continue writing my fellow author!
I believe your literary use was quite astounding. I enjoyed the way your thoughts meshed together in an orderly fashion and thoroughly enjoyed the visual descriptions that seem to submerse you into the perspective of the narrator. I implore you to continue writing this emotional type of peotry and hope your astutness is prevelant in your self-worth of your writing capabilites.
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