This was a beautiful display of emotion. Loss is always painful and the other side is not always thought of, in terms of how they react and feel. In this poem I feel that the loss that the girl feels after her death, and I understand why she waits in a place that she held fast in her heart. Very well done, keep up the great writing.
It sounds like you have had to face a challenging time in your life and make some tough decisions. I feel that there was a lot of anguish leading up to this poem. Since it was your first poem since fourth grade I would guess what ever you went through was very difficult, to make you want to write this poem. The words are simple and strong, they represent a thought process, with reason and logic involved. In the end the decision to write this poem may have helped sort out what was causing the grief and anguish. I guess I took it as a poem of hope in a time of despair.
This poem reminds me of my Stepfather, who would fully appreciate the sentiment. I can picture the man in the grocery store scratching his head hoping he chooses the right products. This was a great little anecdotal poem, I liked it very much.
This was a very beautiful poem. The meaning of solstice is one that we don't often hear of. I applaud the use of a noted Christmas poem, since the holiday of Solstice was adapted by the Christians and made into Christmas. The poem really touched my heart and I enjoyed it very much. I have no critiques for grammar or spelling. My only thought is I wished the Kings could have been referred to by name. But the meaning of the poem is what matters and that is what was captured, Great job.
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