Very eerie but I like it! It's a very interesting take and format. So if I understand correctly the patient's brain is conversing with itself. At first I thought it was two patients in a dark cell talking to one another but now I get it :) Nice job.
Ohh this is great, I didn't want it to be over so soon! So what was it from? The spider or rat? Haha. Very good imagery as well. Good concept for a story.
Love is very complicated. It has so many different kinds of effects on people it's crazy. Good, bad, in-between. In the narrator's case, I got the impression that they were once in love but they were betrayed. The are suicidal and they want their death to be a consequence to the person who broke their heart.
It's powerful. Especially the last few lines.
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