I really enjoyed reading this beggining. I thought it was creative and something different that I have never read anything like this before. However, there was a lot of gramma mistakes and I believe that you really must revise it, as there are are simple mistakes that would be picked up in an instant if it was read again. Like 'I forgot to get the snail.' I assumed this was mail because it then continued on about letters. There was also the issue of 'Silvia.' I was unsure of who this was for a while because it was never mentioned untill 'old mum' was mentioned. My third and final critisism is that I believe the story jumped around a lot. This can be effective with some writers with a certain degree of control within this. The story begun with talking about the relationship between the character and their mother, then it changed and talked about how things changed. Could I surgest coming back to the place where the character was in the first paragraph before starting a new topic?
But overall, I enjoyed reading this piece of writing. There is room for imporvment within this, but I would buy this book.
Haha, I like it, it is very original. I never would have thought about making a monolouge about missmatched socks. Great use of words and layout. A perfect length too. Please continue writing comedy monologes. I would love to read more. It discribes how some of us do feel every day. It would be a fantastic monologe to do, if it were a great, crative and funny actor/actress.
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