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Review of Don't Go  Open in new Window.
Review by Catriona Cowie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
I like the, what I suppose you could say 'moral' of the poem, however, the rhymes do not do it justice. There is something clunky about them, which would be endearing if it was a topic of a slightly more childish nature. The speaker is some form of widow (not necessarily because their partner has passed away), and they are in deep despair at having lost their loved one (on an emotional level, at least). This means the way in which the poem is written needs to be more mature, and I believe, would greatly serve not having rhymes. The rhymes, in my opinion, only diminish the integrity of the speaker.

Other than some rhythm problems with the couplets, the ending is beautiful, and the final verse is definitely the stand out.

I hope this helped in some way!

Catriona
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Review of Love, to me  Open in new Window.
Review by Catriona Cowie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
This is lovely and sweet, and I could see it being in a valentines day card. The reason I didn't give it more is because I felt some of the rhymes were forced and didn't quite fit (my heart is a boulder?), but it's difficult to write a rhyming poem about love that doesn't sound generic, so I commend you for pulling it off!
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